Electrical Appliance Ownership and Housework Time

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Cambridge IELTS 16 Academic Test 1 Writing Task 1 visual

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The charts show the percentage of three types of electrical appliances: , and from 1920 to 2019. The while the number of hours of decreased gradually over the time period.

The a washing machine was the highest 40% in 1920. to reach The a refrigerator but the percentage to 90% in 1960. There was a in 1980 and, after that, the rate was stable until the end of the period.

The amount of time doing housework was 50 hours per week in 1920 and decreased steadily to 20 hours per week in 1960. Then, the amount of time

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.0

The response presents a clear structure with a valid overview and generally readable language, which is its strongest aspect. However, it completely omits the vacuum cleaner data, one of three key series in the chart, and contains several grammatical and word-choice errors that reduce precision.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Achievement

5.5

The response provides an acceptable overview and covers the washing machine, refrigerator, and housework figures reasonably accurately, but it entirely omits the vacuum cleaner series, a major feature of the chart, and misstates housework hours as a 'percentage of 10'.

Coherence and Cohesion

6.0

The response is organised into logical paragraphs with a clear progression from overview to details, though linking is somewhat mechanical and the final data point is introduced awkwardly.

Lexical Resource

6.0

Vocabulary is generally adequate for describing trends, using terms like 'upward trends', 'dramatically rose', and 'stable', but imprecise phrases such as 'the rate of household' and 'reached the percentage 0f 10' limit accuracy.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6.0

A mix of simple and complex structures is attempted, but recurring errors such as 'was gradually increased', 'a gradual increased', and 'each household spend' show imperfect control of passive and tense forms.