Graduate Qualifications in an Engineering Company

All twelve percentages are reported correctly, but the overview incorrectly says science master’s degrees led in both years. The final paragraph repeats this error by calling science PhDs second and science master’s degrees dominant in 2008, when their shares were 30% and 29% respectively. These ranking errors weaken otherwise relevant comparisons.

The response is logically organised with clear paragraphing and a range of cohesive devices, though the sequencing of figures is sometimes mechanical and list-like.

Vocabulary for proportions and change is varied, including “rose sharply” and “declined marginally”. Some wording could be more precise: the charts concern graduate employees, and the legend’s broad subject label is Arts rather than Art. Repeated degree labels also make parts of the report read like a list.

A wide range of structures is used with strong control, including complex contrastive and participle constructions, and errors are rare and minor.

All individual percentages and the change in the leading category are reported correctly, and the overview identifies the postgraduate rise. However, the introduction incorrectly counts three postgraduate and three undergraduate categories instead of four and two. Comparisons of the magnitudes of change could be more explicit.

Ideas progress logically from overview to 1980 details and then 2008 changes, with effective use of cohesive devices like 'whereas', 'meanwhile' and 'overtaking' that create a seamless account.

Vocabulary for change is varied, including “climbing”, “dipping slightly” and “held steady”. Precision is weaker in references to “undergraduates” and “scientists”: the chart classifies graduates by qualification, not current student status or occupation, and its subject label is Arts rather than Art.

Complex comparative and participle constructions are generally controlled well. In “doctoral scientists rose to 30%”, making the share the subject would clarify what changed. “Postgraduate Art also increased” is better expressed as an increase in the combined share, since the two component categories moved in opposite directions.