Electricity Production by Fuel in Australia and France

The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000.

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Response 01
Estimated band5.5/ 9

Overall assessment

The response attempts comprehensive coverage of both countries across the two years and shows some ambition in vocabulary, particularly with change verbs. However, it is weakened by frequent data inaccuracies and misattributed fuel sources, as well as unclear phrasing and grammatical errors that obscure several comparisons.

TA

Task Achievement

The response covers both charts and years with an attempted overview, but recurring data misattributions (e.g., calling Australia's 50-unit coal share oil, describing the 130-unit coal figure as a 70-unit rise) and omission of France's totals make much of the detail inaccurate or confusing.

5.0
CC

Coherence and Cohesion

There is a discernible overall structure with an overview and body paragraphs organised by country, but progression within paragraphs is often mechanical and some sentences, such as the reference to building 'the static', disrupt the message.

5.5
LR

Lexical Resource

The writer attempts a range of less common vocabulary for trends ('skyrocketed', 'plummeted', 'hiked'), though some items are imprecise or misused and technical terms are occasionally conflated.

6.0
GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

A mix of structures is attempted, but frequent errors in sentence construction, capitalisation, punctuation, and reference (e.g., 'the unusual year', 'after 20 years from the total of 170') reduce accuracy and occasionally obscure meaning.

5.5

What to work on next

Verify each figure against the charts before writing, clearly labelling which fuel source each number belongs to and correcting errors such as confusing oil with coal and omitting France's total production figures.

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