International Tourism: Tension or Understanding

Nowadays, international tourism is the biggest industry in the world. Unfortunately, international tourism creates tensions rather than understanding between people from different countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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The growth of tourism and the numbers of people travelling to other countries for their vacations has led to debate as to whether this is beneficial. I believe that there are many problems which arise out of the tourist industry, and will examine these in detail. Many people argue that travel broadens the mind. However, this statement does not fully hold water. I would argue that spending a few weeks in another country is not long enough to gain a proper understanding of an alien culture. A foreigner visiting Britain might be met with the traditional British reserve, and mistakenly conclude that the British are unfriendly. Furthermore, some people are unwilling to open their minds. A Western traveller to an Arab country is unlikely to consider that the veiling of women is acceptable. Being a tourist in a foreign country brings with it problems that can lead to dislike of the native people. Firstly, a foreigner is vulnerable, and is often ripped off by locals. Secondly, the language barrier can lead to misunderstandings. Thirdly, tourists are often , which can ruin a holiday. When I went to Bali, people tried to sell me something every five minutes, and this totally spoilt my sunbathing. Local people also often end up disliking foreigners. Visitors may mistakenly act contrary to local norms, or they may just be plain offensive, as many drunken British holidaymakers must seem to the Spanish. Global tourism can lead to , who may feel their traditional way of life is under threat. Additionally, the relative wealth of the foreign visitors can cause envy and resentment. In conclusion, I would say that I largely agree with the argument that global tourism creates misunderstanding between people from different cultures, and that the differences are often a cause for conflict rather than celebration.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 8.0

The response presents a clear, consistent position with well-developed, logically ordered ideas and some vivid supporting examples. Its strongest aspect is the flexible, natural range of language, while the main limitation is that some arguments are illustrated rather than fully explored in depth.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Response

8.0

The response directly addresses the question with a clearly stated and consistently maintained position, developing relevant main ideas with supporting explanation and personal examples, though some points are asserted rather than fully examined.

Coherence and Cohesion

8.0

Ideas are organised in logical paragraphs that sequence the tourist's and locals' perspectives clearly, with effective use of cohesive devices and referencing that rarely draws attention.

Lexical Resource

8.0

A wide range of precise and idiomatic vocabulary, including phrases such as hold water, alien culture, and under threat, is used flexibly and accurately with only occasional less precise wording.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

8.0

A wide range of grammatical structures, including complex and conditional forms, is used with flexibility and consistent accuracy, with errors being rare and inconsequential.