tourism is the biggest industry in the world. Unfortunately, international tourism creates tension rather than understanding between people from different cultures. This evident situation has become the result of all over the world. Since the second half of the 20th-century people from different countries and various places around the world and it is getting more and more popular to travel a lot and discover unknown lands these days. International tourism has its advantages as well as disadvantages. are quite obvious- people have a lot of amazing opportunities to know the world inside out, to see and feel the bright colours of wild nature, traditions and customs of different cultures belonging to Asia, Europe, Australia and Africa. International tourists of the economic and financial sphere of the countries they visit. Also, they help to - especially in small and poor countries, giving them the chance to survive. People are getting closer and friendlier to each other they have. On the other hand, endless tourist streams flowing into their country every year. They want to have a rest and live their ordinary life as they used to live before a foreign invasion. Some countries are very close and private, their culture and traditions are very strict and strange . The manner of behaviour, dress and many others which were brought and shown by foreigners irritates, makes local people angry and unfriendly and not ready to accept and communicate well. For instance, white tourists in some parts of Africa are really in serious danger in the streets and poor districts of many towns and cities because of the white dominance and oppression in the past. Rich tourists in developing countries are the source of displeasure, aggression, misunderstanding and tension . would like to say that the future of international tourism completely depends on people themselves and their correct and acceptable behaviour in overseas countries. It won't cause much tension and misunderstanding but trust, respect and friendly attitude to each other. Nevertheless, when different cultures meet, they always have a lot of things to compare, accept, value or argue about.
International Tourism: Tension or Understanding
Nowadays, international tourism is the biggest industry in the world. Unfortunately, international tourism creates tensions rather than understanding between people from different countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
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Why this response received Band 6.0
The response engages with the question and offers relevant ideas on both the understanding and tension created by tourism, with some concrete illustration. Its main limitations are an inconsistently signalled position, overgeneralised claims, missing paragraph organisation, and recurring grammatical and collocational errors that occasionally blur meaning.
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6.0The response addresses the question and develops relevant ideas on both sides, but the position is only indirectly and inconsistently signalled, and some claims are overgeneralised or thinly supported.
Coherence and Cohesion
6.0Progression is broadly clear with some cohesive devices, but the response lacks paragraphing and transitions between ideas are often mechanical or abrupt.
Lexical Resource
6.0There is an adequate range of vocabulary with some attempts at less common items, though awkward collocations such as 'invest the development' and imprecise phrasing reduce precision.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
6.0A mix of simple and complex structures is used with some flexibility, but frequent errors in tense, agreement, and article use are noticeable, though meaning is mostly maintained.
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