International Tourism: Tension or Understanding

Nowadays, international tourism is the biggest industry in the world. Unfortunately, international tourism creates tensions rather than understanding between people from different countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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In recent times, the role of the tourism industry in the world economy cannot be neglected. The tourism industry has emerged as one of the in the world, providing jobs to millions. is becoming smaller, and I believe it is because of this frequent international travel. I do not agree that international tourism creates tension; in fact, it brings together. When a person travels from one country to another, they learn about each other’s culture, cuisine and habits. People become more tolerant towards each other’s differences. International tourism the natural beauty which could not be found in their country. I believe, due to increased international travel, . For instance, countries like Maldives, Thailand, India (Goa) etc. thrives on tourism and we can clearly notice the difference between the people’s attitude towards each other in these places as compared to others. People are friendlier, understanding and accommodating. They are ready to change themselves easily to cater to new demands Another good example would be Dubai, which is but is very . It is because of international tourism that Dubai is more tolerant and modern and developed. can learn a lot from different countries. For instance, if you go to Singapore, you cannot help but notice how effective their public transport how stringently all the rules are followed. Similarly, many tourists come to India to seek spiritual guidance and to learn yoga, which they might not get in their country. In a nutshell, I think, international travel alleviates tension In today’s economy, when every country is interdependent for trade and business, international travel helps people from different countries to understand each other and exist in harmony.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.5

The response presents a clear disagreement with the statement and develops it through relevant examples such as Thailand, Dubai, and Singapore, which is its strongest aspect. The main limitation is grammatical control, with recurring subject-verb agreement and word-form errors, alongside single-block organisation that weakens paragraphing.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Response

7.0

The response addresses the question directly with a clear position of disagreement, well-extended main ideas, and relevant supporting examples throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion

6.0

Ideas progress logically within the argument, but the essay reads as one continuous block with limited paragraphing and occasionally mechanical linking.

Lexical Resource

6.5

Vocabulary is generally adequate and sometimes natural for the topic, though there are imprecise collocations such as 'people have subdued' and 'brings different culture together'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6.0

A mix of simple and complex structures is used, but errors in subject-verb agreement, articles, and comparative forms recur without seriously impeding meaning.