International Tourism: Tension or Understanding

Nowadays, international tourism is the biggest industry in the world. Unfortunately, international tourism creates tensions rather than understanding between people from different countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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As air transport facilitates vital connectivity around the world, international tourism has

become the most . However, the industry polarizes people of different cultures. I disagree with this notion because international tourism, in my opinion, substantially promotes cultural exchange.

To begin with, some people argue that tourism is one of the main between locals and visitors. The burgeoning industry develops radically, from which a period of chaos and infringements ensue. Rome, for example, is renowned for its scenic wonders but its infamous petty crimes such as pickpocketing or robbery have become an emerging concern among travelers. Not only Venice but most tourist attractions also are forced into a similar impasse since to control crime rates due to the enormous number of tourists. In the long run, it may leave a bad impression on the natives to the visitors.

On the other hand, I believe that international tourism is a remarkable way to develop understanding between cultures. The fundamentals of culture are usually expressed through traditional food and music that have to be experienced first-hand in the original country or region. To give an example, the foreign traveler can perceive a special charm in Vietnamese culture by listening to the imperial music in Hue, a masterpiece of intangible heritage by UNESCO, which beautifully the feudal era of Vietnam . Furthermore, many overseas visitors want to visit the city for the extraordinary, balanced taste of spicy, salty, and umami in “Bun bo Hue” which comes from the fermented shrimp paste. In other words, the flavorful taste of Bun bo Hue with delightful live imperial court music is an unrivaled experience of culture that people cannot live vicariously by reading books or watching .

In conclusion, international tourism meaningful cultural exchange despite several security drawbacks. In my opinion, the authorities of tourist attractions can develop their security by engaging artificial intelligence in public cameras in which they can detect and prevent crimes.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 7.0

The response presents a clear disagreement with the statement and develops it with relevant, concrete examples of both tension and cultural exchange. Its strongest aspect is the vivid, well-chosen Hue illustration supporting the writer's position, while the main limitation is occasional awkward phrasing and slightly underdeveloped treatment of the opposing view.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Response

7.0

The response addresses the question directly with a clear position of disagreement, develops main ideas with relevant examples, though the opposing view is acknowledged but only partly developed before the conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion

6.5

Progression is generally logical with clear paragraphing and linking devices, but some connections are mechanical or slightly strained, such as the abrupt shift between Venice and crime control.

Lexical Resource

7.0

Vocabulary is flexible and often precise, featuring items like 'lucrative', 'burgeoning', and 'intangible heritage', though occasional collocational awkwardness such as 'develops radically' and 'impasse' reduces precision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.0

A good range of complex structures is used with frequent error-free sentences, and errors such as 'which beautifully recreate' are minor and do not impede communication.