International Tourism: Tension or Understanding

Nowadays, international tourism is the biggest industry in the world. Unfortunately, international tourism creates tensions rather than understanding between people from different countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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International tourism is now considered the largest industry in the world. However, many think that it does not foster mutual understanding between people of different nations, but causes tensions to arise. Although problems associated with international tourism are inevitable , I would argue that this industry plays an important role in promoting peace among countries.

On the one hand, I agree that international tourism, in some cases, could lead to anger between people of different cultural backgrounds. The truth is, every country possesses its own indigenous culture, beliefs, mind-sets and norms that foreign tourists are not aware of. Ignorance and carelessness sometimes causes tourists to behave in ways which fail to respect local customs or religious values . For example, kissing someone on the cheek is a common in many European countries, while in many Asian cultures it may only be considered appropriate among family members or lovers and thus, can be considered an offence or sexual harassment . This is just one example where international tourists may create irritation in cross-cultural interaction .

On the other hand, I believe that tourism, if conducted with respect for the traditions, practices and customs of the host country, will be a that contributes to international goodwill and enriches friendship between nations. In fact, overseas travel gives tourists around the world a glimpse into other cultures by allowing them to experience different ways of life, or visiting . That helps tourists to learn, understand and respect another culture’s values, the cultural gap. When tourism brings together people of different cultures and regions, it can foster peace and friendship among them.

In conclusion, despite some problems, I am of the opinion that international tourism can enhance local cultural awareness and in building better understanding and peaceful relations between people of different nations.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 7.0

The response presents a clear, consistently maintained position and develops both sides of the argument with relevant, well-explained examples, showing strong task coverage. Language is generally flexible and accurate, though occasional errors in subject-verb agreement and article use, together with some formulaic organisation, keep it from reaching the very top bands.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Response

7.5

The essay fully addresses the question with a clear, consistently held position, well-developed main ideas, and relevant supporting examples such as the greeting customs comparison.

Coherence and Cohesion

7.0

Progression is logical across clear paragraphs with appropriate cohesive devices, though sequencing and linking are at times mechanical or formulaic.

Lexical Resource

7.0

Vocabulary is sufficiently flexible and precise, with good awareness of collocation such as 'international goodwill' and 'bridge the cultural gap', despite occasional imprecise word choices.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.0

A range of complex structures is used with generally good control, though frequent minor errors in agreement, articles, and verb forms such as 'Ignorance and carelessness sometimes causes' slightly reduce accuracy.