International Tourism: Tension or Understanding

Nowadays, international tourism is the biggest industry in the world. Unfortunately, international tourism creates tensions rather than understanding between people from different countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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In the last two decades, the tourism sector has seen . Currently, it is one of the biggest industries in the world, but, , it creates tension instead of among the people from various cultures. I completely disagree with this opinion and believe that it brings harmony, fraternity and love across nations.

First of all, foreign tourists visit any other country to explore its culture or the scenic beauty. As a result, before the trip, they the tradition and lifestyle of the nation, so that they can enjoy it . By learning about the other culture, they show their respect to the people of the tourist area. In addition, tourists also generate employment opportunities, hence people respect them and try to make their experience pleasurable. or transportation industry benefit from tourists and make arrangements according to their requirements, so ultimately this creates understanding and love between them.

Moreover, the tourist industry is an extremely important part of an economy. Foreign visitors are a source of revenue generation which helps in boosting the economy of the country. Therefore, the government also provides all the facilities to the tourists and tries to minimize the circumstances where any conflict can arise due to , in all the famous tourist destinations, special guides are provided to the international visitors so that they will not face any problem due to the different traditions, particularly, language.

To conclude, international tourism is the largest sector in the world and it brings people from different traditions together and also assists in the . Additionally, it is a great way to understand and learn about new cultures and popularize your traditions across the globe.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 7.0

The response presents a clear, consistent disagreement with the statement and develops it with relevant ideas about cultural exchange, employment, and economic benefits, supported by some concrete examples. The main limitation is language that is occasionally awkward or imprecise in collocation, and some ideas remain generalized rather than fully extended.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Response

7.0

The response addresses all parts of the task with a clear position sustained throughout, and main ideas are relevantly developed with support, though some points rely on generalization rather than full extension.

Coherence and Cohesion

7.0

Ideas are logically organized into clear paragraphs with a range of cohesive devices used naturally, although occasional overuse of connectors such as 'so' and 'therefore' slightly reduces variety.

Lexical Resource

6.5

There is an adequate range of vocabulary for the topic with some less common items, but imprecise collocations and word choices such as 'sharp progression', 'fraternity', and 'coordination' limit precision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6.5

A mix of complex and simple structures is used with reasonable flexibility, but recurring errors in prepositions and agreement, such as 'research about' and 'People from hotel or transportation industry', reduce accuracy.