International Tourism: Tension or Understanding

Nowadays, international tourism is the biggest industry in the world. Unfortunately, international tourism creates tensions rather than understanding between people from different countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Today the world is more connected than any time before and people can arrive at their destination within 24 hours. However, while this possibility different cultures every year, between people with different habits and costumes. To begin, tourism creates isolation more than integration. In fact, tourists prefer to look at different places, like sitting in front of the television screen, watching a documentary, more than sharing time with the indigenous population. Furthermore, tourists don't respect foreign habits and cultures, often because they don't For example, they on the ground, or even worse they don't respect their hosts’ religion. Nevertheless, the effects of international tourism are not all negative. Sometimes tourists fall in love with people and places they visit and , acting as mediators between cultures and enhancing integration. It's the case of lots of tourist guides that decided to move abroad and enjoy a different lifestyle and culture, trying to share their feelings with visitors. Also speaking the language of the place we visit can help us understand people from different cultures. In addition, a large amount of of some countries to close their border to foreign people. This can lead to a better comprehension of these cultures and so to integration. In conclusion, the biggest the need of changes in the way tourism is structured, so it could and reciprocal understanding between cultures.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.0

The response directly engages the question with a clear, qualified position and develops both critical and positive views of tourism with relevant examples. Its main limitation is recurring grammatical and word-choice errors, such as 'costumes' for 'customs' and subject-verb mistakes, which persist throughout and reduce precision.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Response

6.5

The response addresses the task with a clear nuanced position and develops supporting ideas with examples, though some arguments, such as the tourism revenue point, remain thinly developed.

Coherence and Cohesion

5.5

The discussion moves from tensions to potential benefits and a conclusion, with signposts such as "nevertheless". However, the whole essay is one paragraph, and the shifts between guides, language and tourism income need clearer grouping.

Lexical Resource

6.0

Vocabulary is adequate for the topic with some appropriate phrasing, but errors like 'costumes' for 'customs' and 'permits to millions' show imprecision and limited flexibility at points.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6.0

A mix of simple and complex sentences is attempted, yet frequent errors in agreement, pronoun reference, and article use, such as 'the biggest industry have to feel' and 'don't understand it', reduce accuracy while meaning stays mostly clear.