International Tourism: Tension or Understanding

Nowadays, international tourism is the biggest industry in the world. Unfortunately, international tourism creates tensions rather than understanding between people from different countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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In today’s world, international tourism is generating enormous financial wealth and has become the primary source of income for numerous countries around the globe. Although many people think this industry is likely to cause tension, my conviction is that international tourism greatly facilitates understanding between people of different .

There are indeed several instances of international travel creating social conflicts. One recent incident happened when Logan Paul, a renowned , visited Japan and Japanese traditions and lifestyles. Such mockery caused tremendous public outrage and prejudice against this young American. Another example is Chinese tourists’ inappropriate and selfish behavior during a in a Thai tourist destination a few years ago. Even though these examples the , they, , increased tension between the countries involved.

That being said, in most cases, visiting a foreign country can help tourists understand more about local customs and lifestyles. While the modern media, such as TV or newspapers, give people some foreign culture exposure, overseas tourists tend to have more authentic and unique experiences that lead to more profound understanding. This is extremely important because embracing cultural differences is key to establishing and maintaining social relationships in this day and age.

In conclusion, international tourism allows overseas visitors to experience different cultures and therefore connects everyone through mutual understanding. In my opinion, we should not merely judge the industry based on a number of situations where conflicts arise from misconduct of only a group of individuals.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 7.0

The response presents a clear, consistent position and balances a concession with well-chosen supporting examples, including concrete cases of tourist misconduct. The main limitation is that the counterargument receives more vivid development than the writer's own view, leaving the core claim about fostering understanding somewhat underexplored.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Response

7.0

The essay addresses the question directly with a clear stated position, acknowledges the opposing view, and supports both sides with relevant examples, though the writer's own argument is less fully developed than the concession.

Coherence and Cohesion

7.0

Ideas progress logically through clear paragraphing with effective linking devices such as 'That being said' and 'Even though', producing a coherent overall argument with only minor mechanical sequencing.

Lexical Resource

7.0

Vocabulary is reasonably varied and precise, with phrases like 'tremendous public outrage', 'authentic and unique experiences', and 'mutual understanding', alongside occasional less natural collocations such as 'cultural background' and 'buffet party'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.0

A good range of structures is used flexibly, including complex concessive and relative clauses, with mostly accurate control and only occasional awkward or slightly unidiomatic constructions.