Library Ground Floor Redevelopment 2001 and 2009

The response includes an overview and most key changes, including relocated collections, films and DVDs, and computers. It could distinguish the Children’s Books section from the separate children’s area more clearly and explicitly report the relocation of Self Help.

Ideas progress logically through a clear overview followed by 2001 and 2009 descriptions, with cohesive devices and referencing used naturally across the whole response.

Vocabulary is flexible and precise for map description, with natural phrases such as 'underwent extensive renovations', 'reduced in size', and 'a dedicated space', showing good control of less common lexis.

A wide range of structures is used, including passive voice and participial phrases, with generally good control. The shift to ‘is now used’ within the historical account could be made more consistent; the past perfect is appropriate with the established 2009 endpoint.

The response covers the overview, most changes, and comparisons, but key details are inaccurate or invented: the new subject shelves are described as lining the east side when they run along the west, tables are wrongly said to occupy the fiction section's former space, and the children's books area is omitted.

Ideas progress logically through a clear overview and time-based paragraphs, with effective use of cohesive devices such as 'meanwhile', 'by 2009', and 'next to that section'.

Vocabulary is flexible and mostly precise for describing change and location, including 'repurposed', 'scaled down', and 'virtually every other space had been altered', with only minor awkward phrasing such as 'new selections of texts'.

A wide range of structures is used with generally good control, including passive and participle constructions. Minor issues include singular ‘was’ before the compound subject ‘the entrance and the librarian’s desk’ and a space before a full stop; simple past would also make the opening more direct.

The response covers the main changes and all six book categories on the 2009 left wall. Some descriptions go beyond the plan: films and DVDs are called interactive, and an improved visitor experience is asserted without evidence. The former history area is also described too broadly when the new sections extend farther down the wall.

Ideas are logically grouped by section of the floor with clear progression and effective cohesive devices, though some linking phrases are occasionally formulaic.

Vocabulary is flexible and precise for describing change, with natural items such as 'retained', 'underwent relocation' and 'converted into', with only occasional awkwardness such as 'books of four various types'.

A wide range of structures is used with good control, including complex relative and participle clauses, and errors are minor and non-impeding.

The response describes both plans and gives an overview, but several details are inaccurate: the desk did not move right, the kitchen is misidentified as a cookery collection, fiction did not span the entire top wall, and the table descriptions need correction.

Paragraphing is logical, moving from overview to 2001 and 2009 descriptions, with cohesive devices that give clear progression throughout.

Vocabulary is varied, with useful spatial language such as “adjoining” and “at the bottom right”. However, “cookery” misidentifies the kitchen, while “tall” and the description of the newspaper section add unsupported detail.

A range of sentence structures is generally controlled well. However, the singular head noun in “A series of ... shelves” requires a singular verb, and “now define” shifts away from the past-tense description of 2009.