The research, investigation and usage of an alternative of crude oil and its by-products is considered to be given the most important world attention nowadays. In my opinion, I agree that exploration and research on alternatives to fossil fuels should be a targeted goal for the world because it will solve many problems and reduce quite a good number of environmental issues. It is obvious that efforts made by the human being to explore and advance have also caused major problems such as water, air and environmental pollution. An excessive amount of carbon dioxide released into the atmosphere has dramatically affected the ozone layer, which is supposed to protect human habitat. The fossil fuel is damaging the environment in an unbelievable pace and many world leaders have already agreed that the use of fossil fuels should be controlled to save the environment. Now the question arises how much importance it should get? As it is related to the very existence of the mother planet – Earth, and a global problem, without any doubt it should be given a global priority. If not, after few decades it would be too late to control the catastrophic consequences. To urgently tackle this problem, world leaders from different countries should sit together and agree to policies that all countries in the world would follow. as soon as possible. It is also important that some major safe alternatives like solar power, biogas, green energy etc. should be widely used and the government should encourage people to . In addition, the climate issue involves all nations of the world and the fatal effects will affect . That is why it is imperative that global attention and sponsorship are given by the governments of different countries and international bodies to conduct the research, to invent a safe alternative to the fossil fuel immediately. In conclusion, it is very important that governments of numerous countries set aside a robust financial plan and policy the exploration of green energy in order to combat .
Safe Alternatives to Fossil Fuels as a Global Priority
The exploration and development of safe alternatives to fossil fuels should be the most important global priority today. to what extent do you agree or disagree?
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Overall assessment
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response maintains support for developing alternatives to fossil fuels and discusses environmental harm and international action. Its organisation is weakened by a single continuous paragraph and repeated statements of urgency. Several ideas need more specific support, while grammatical errors and imprecise expressions sometimes make the proposed actions difficult to understand.
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Task Response
6.5The response addresses the question with a clear, consistent position and relevant main ideas, though development is somewhat repetitive and relies on general claims rather than extended or specific support.
Coherence and Cohesion
5.5The ideas have a broadly understandable sequence, but the essay is one continuous paragraph. Claims about environmental harm, urgency and international action are not clearly grouped, and repetition and the inserted rhetorical question interrupt progression.
Lexical Resource
6.5The response uses a range of relevant terms, including "catastrophic consequences" and "biogas". Some expressions are imprecise or unnatural, such as "a robust financial plan and policy paralleled to the exploration", which makes the proposed action difficult to interpret.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
6.0Simple and complex sentences are attempted, but errors in articles and sentence construction recur. Examples include "affect the every single of them" and the direct question "how much importance it should get?", which needs the word order "should it get".