Technological improvements affect our lives in tremendous ways. Each designed car model fuel requirement per mile. But, unfortunately, each created device affects nature atrociously because of fossil fuel usage. This essay is about possible opportunities of alternative energy and why it needs to be taken care of. First of all, the main reason why the alternative energy is global warming. It has become a serious concern in the world and the underlying reason for this happening is carbon dioxide emission. Reduction of this perilous emission of carbon dioxide could put us one step ahead and the easiest way to reach this goal is the use of alternative energy in our daily life for different reasons such as driving cars, heaters. Secondly, fossil fuel plants which will be depleted eventually. Due to this fact, it is the most expensive energy source for today and will be in the future until its . Also, anyone who wants to collect fuel should build expensive plants and as a result of this sector is controlled by big companies that are known as main and profiteers of wars. Furthermore, economic effects of fuel make world peace nearly impossible. Many wars erupt because of this material most people concern that "World War III" will strike because of it. On the other hand, safe alternative energy receives its power from nature. Such as, hydropower plants, solar power farms and . Because of these, possibilities of this limitless power fossil fuel. Also, anyone who wants to collect one of these powers only needs to build the corresponding facility and if produced power is higher than his requirement he could even sell it to the government regarding the newly approved bill. In conclusion, usage of this limitless power will definitely our future and because of its possibilities, governments should pay more attention.
Safe Alternatives to Fossil Fuels as a Global Priority
The exploration and development of safe alternatives to fossil fuels should be the most important global priority today. to what extent do you agree or disagree?
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Overall assessment
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response addresses the topic with several relevant reasons for prioritising alternative energy, showing its strongest aspect in the range of ideas on emissions, resource depletion, and geopolitics. Its main limitations are an unclear, late-emerging position and frequent grammatical and word-choice errors that reduce precision.
IELTS criteria
How each score was decided
Task Response
6.0The response addresses the task with relevant main ideas about alternative energy, but the position is only implied and imprecisely framed, and some points, such as the discussion of wars and profiteers, are asserted rather than fully developed.
Coherence and Cohesion
6.0Ideas are arranged in a broadly logical order with basic sequencing devices, but linking is at times mechanical or misused, and progression within paragraphs is occasionally hard to follow.
Lexical Resource
6.0There is a sufficient range of topic-related vocabulary, including items like carbon dioxide emission and hydropower plants, but awkward or inaccurate choices such as 'tribunes', 'subsidises', and 'affects nature atrociously' reduce precision.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
5.5A mix of simple and complex structures is attempted, but frequent errors in agreement, comparison, and article use, for example 'each designed car model increase' and 'way too higher', mean accuracy is limited and meaning is sometimes strained.