Many people believe that the research for green and safe energy as a replacement for oil should be the main global priority these days. To a certain point, I would agree with that, but some considerations should be as well. It is true that the environment, people should and cleaner source of energy. It is undeniable that the world has become fossil fuels such as coal and oil as of energy. Consequently, air pollution has become a serious issue in certain cities such as Beijing and Mexico City. Therefore, some countries have been spending a large amount of . Some of the examples would be the solar panel system, windmill, nuclear plant and hydro. In fact, the time has come for the world to work together in harmony to introduce an effective solution towards the invention and use of . Despite all the positive sides of alternative energy, people should also be aware of several things. Firstly, many people do not realise that some of these energy generators are also dangerous for the environment. For example, many scientists believe that nuclear power plants are friendly to the environment, but these plants must be carefully maintained. A small leakage in the generator could become a fatal issue for the society, as in such cases it became a national disaster. Secondly, the expenditure for research and development of green energy worldwide is higher than the exploration cost of fossil fuels. Consequently, the government must also provide an extra budget for that around the world. It is also difficult for all nations to work together towards the introduction of an alternative energy source. For instance, the USA might adopt a policy not to use the fossil fuel and invest in a more environment-friendly energy source, however, adopting this same policy for countries like India and Pakistan would be quite impossible. In conclusion, to a certain point, I would agree that we should and greener sources of energy as an alternative to fossil fuels globally. But I also believe that should also be conducted with proper feasibility studies and cautious measurements as it could also have catastrophic effects on the environment as well. And then the government in each country should also provide a higher budget for research as they are more expensive than the fossil fuel exploration.
Safe Alternatives to Fossil Fuels as a Global Priority
The exploration and development of safe alternatives to fossil fuels should be the most important global priority today. to what extent do you agree or disagree?
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Overall assessment
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response presents a clear qualified position and develops it with relevant examples such as nuclear risks and differing national capacities, which is its strongest aspect. The main limitation is a reliance on simple linking and some imprecise word choices and grammar that occasionally reduce precision.
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Task Response
7.0The response addresses all parts of the question with a clear qualified position, well-developed main ideas, and relevant supporting examples, though some points remain under-explored.
Coherence and Cohesion
6.5Ideas are arranged logically with a discernible progression, but cohesion is at times mechanical, with formulaic linkers such as 'Firstly' and an abrupt final 'And then'.
Lexical Resource
6.5The response uses an adequate range of topic-related vocabulary, but imprecise phrases like 'overdependence on', 'seek for', and 'cautiously measured' limit precision.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
6.5A mix of sentence structures is used with reasonable flexibility, though recurring errors such as 'the world has become overdependence' and tense inconsistency reduce accuracy.