It is undeniable that the human kind is proliferating uncontrollably, by depleting natural resources and damaging our sole home, like bacteria do in the petri dish. Fossil fuels are, without any doubt, one of our biggest problems since they are the main reason for the air pollution and the . It has been suggested that safe alternatives should be explored and developed with this view. With the advances in technology and globalisation, the need for mobility and fossil fuels . that connects us with the rest of the world consumes fossil fuels. As a result of this, air pollution has unprecedented levels and lung cancer cases have risen so much that one day they will surpass flu cases. And even worse, we are polluting the world's air and water resources and soon it is predicted the for water. We have even made a hole in the ozone layer and we are now less defenceless to ultraviolet rays of the sun and possible asteroid crashes. We are with our own hands. These problems, however, can be overcome by sources. We can attain the same amount of energy by using natural sources solely. We can use solar panels, for instance, for brought heating and vehicles that work with electricity. There is no waste, no pollutant; there is only pure energy. Another alternative would be our wastes to produce energy. For example, Switzerland is one successful pioneer that produces nearly forty percent of its energy need from home wastes by processing them in sophisticated recycling centres. In another category, some experiments have shown that waste olive oils can be used in cars efficiently. With further exploration, new safe alternative energy models can be developed for every aspect of life. My personal view is that governments should energy sources before it is too late for the world, new homes in .
Safe Alternatives to Fossil Fuels as a Global Priority
The exploration and development of safe alternatives to fossil fuels should be the most important global priority today. to what extent do you agree or disagree?
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Overall assessment
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response supports developing alternative energy and gives examples involving solar power and energy from waste. However, it is written as one continuous paragraph, while recurring grammar and word-choice errors reduce precision. Some supporting claims are exaggerated or inaccurate, including the suggestion that the ozone layer protects against asteroid impacts, which weakens the argument.
IELTS criteria
How each score was decided
Task Response
6.5The response addresses the task with a clear, consistent agreement position, develops main ideas with examples, though some supporting claims are exaggerated or underdeveloped.
Coherence and Cohesion
5.5The response moves from environmental problems to possible energy alternatives, but it is presented as one continuous paragraph. Several examples and claims are crowded together, and the lack of paragraph divisions weakens grouping and makes the progression less clear.
Lexical Resource
6.5Vocabulary range is adequate for the task with some less common items like 'unprecedented' and 'subsidise', but collocations are occasionally unnatural, as in 'brought heating' and 'we are bringing our ends'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
6.0A mix of simple and complex structures is attempted, but frequent errors in prepositions, articles, and verb forms, such as 'reached to unprecedented levels' and 'wars will be made for water', slightly impede precision.