Making Sugary Food and Drink Products More Expensive

Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

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Our dietary choices influence our overall well-being. As a result, some believe that people have become increasingly reliant on processed meals and that there is too much sugar in the available on the market. Therefore, the government should levy a surcharge on items with high sugar content. I agree with this approach, and in the following paragraphs, I shall elaborate on my viewpoint.

To begin with, manufacturers nowadays prefer to find methods to describe their products as healthy even if they are not. is sometimes unaware of the included in the drink they purchase. So, raising costs will certainly . Because sugary foods are inexpensive, many individuals consume far too much of them. For example, in the United States, many fast-food establishments provide free drink refills. Hence, people frequently order two or three drinks with their meals. If these eateries were obliged to impose a 20% tax on these beverages and stop providing free refills, many customers probably wouldn’t order more than one.

Moreover, sugary foods are since they lead to obesity and diabetes. Therefore, increasing the price of these harmful drinks and making people aware of the health hazards would encourage customers to make better purchase decisions. In addition, with more and more people switching to healthier diets, the nation will benefit from savings on healthcare in the long run. Thus, superior solutions involve more holistic government intervention.

Some argue that customers should be allowed to make their own decisions and should not be penalized for that are often more delicious than others. Leading manufacturers can make a significant contribution to assisting customers by developing healthier foods that contain less sugar but nevertheless taste like the originals. For example, has introduced several different coke flavors, including coke zero.

To recapitulate, sugary foods and beverages are harmful to people’s health. A higher price should be imposed to encourage people to limit their carbohydrate intake and eventually improve the population’s health.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 7.0

The response presents a clear position supported by relevant explanations and concrete examples, and it demonstrates generally flexible language. Its main limitation is occasional internal inconsistency and imprecise wording, such as the confusing reference to carbohydrates and a sentence that appears to contradict the writer's stance.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Response

7.0

The response addresses the question directly with a clear, consistent agreement position, well-developed main ideas, and relevant supporting examples, though a few statements are slightly imprecise or tangential.

Coherence and Cohesion

7.0

Ideas progress logically across clearly sequenced paragraphs with varied cohesive devices, although one sentence disrupts the argument's internal coherence.

Lexical Resource

7.0

Vocabulary is sufficiently flexible and precise for the topic, including less common items like 'levy a surcharge' and 'perilous', with occasional lapses in word choice.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.0

A good range of sentence structures, including complex and conditional forms, is used with generally strong accuracy; errors are minor and do not impede meaning.