Making Sugary Food and Drink Products More Expensive

Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is no secret that most processed foods and drinks contain excessive amounts of sugar, and this causes several health problems while also contributing to the growing obesity epidemic in many countries. In light of this, many argue that sugary products should be made more expensive in order to discourage consumption and . I completely agree with this viewpoint.

One of the main reasons for the excessive consumption of is their low cost. Therefore, increasing the price of sugary products would be a proven method of reducing their overall consumption. A recent study conducted by the World Health Organization reveals that a 20% price increase in sugary drinks resulted in as much as a 15% decrease in their consumption in just six months. It is very logical that, when sugary products , many people will be less likely to indulge in them as frequently, and will instead opt for healthier alternatives. This will be particularly beneficial for low-income individuals, who are disproportionately affected by obesity and related health problems due to their reliance on cheap, unhealthy food.

In addition, increasing the price of sugary products and imposing higher taxes on manufacturers of such products, can also serve as a excessive amounts of sugar in their products. This way, sellers will be incentivized to reduce the amount of sugar in their products in order to remain competitive in the market and make a profit.

In conclusion, increasing the cost of sugary products is an effective method of reducing sugar consumption and promoting healthier eating habits. It would not only discourage the excessive consumption of these products but also make healthier options more accessible and affordable for all.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 7.0

The strongest aspect is the clear, consistent position supported by relevant reasoning, a cited example, and a well-managed paragraph structure. The main limitation is that ideas remain somewhat predictable and examples could be further developed, while occasional minor grammatical slips and slight mechanical linking prevent the language from reaching a fully flexible level.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Response

7.0

The response fully addresses the question with a clear, consistent position, well-developed main ideas, and relevant supporting evidence, though development is occasionally general rather than extended.

Coherence and Cohesion

7.0

Ideas progress logically across clear paragraphs with a range of cohesive devices, although linking is at times mechanical and one paragraph is notably shorter in development.

Lexical Resource

7.0

Vocabulary is sufficiently flexible and precise for the topic, with good collocations such as obesity epidemic and deterrent, alongside only occasional less natural phrasing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.0

A variety of complex structures is used with generally good control, though minor slips in punctuation and agreement occur without impeding communication.