Fame and fortune are largely dependent on the , persistence, luck and creativity displayed by individuals of a society. These qualities often make them the whole nation becomes anxious and curious just to . Few people believe that people are popular due to their glamour and rich lifestyle. They claim that youngsters should not because they may lead them astray and I don’t agree fully with this proclamation. This essay will analyse the merits and demerits of idealising celebrities before presenting a conclusion. Famous people such as movie or sports stars can be a role model for the young people of a society. Idealising and treating them as their idol can help them to achieve their required goal in life. Following their footprints can result in exploring their own talent which can further showcase marvels and brilliance. Their creativity, innovation and display of their skills and abilities inspire adolescents to . For instance, legendary Amir Khan, the famous Bollywood celebrity, is known for his inspirational and creative movies but not for his wealth or attractive personality. Adolescents copying his qualities and attributes have promoted strong moral and ethical values in a society. , few people believe that following superstars and famous people displaying negativity can mislead young people of our society. Proponents of this viewpoint believe that and at home or in streets can have a severe impact on the society. Moreover, celebrities are often found in smoking advertisements, charged with drugs and other criminal activities, youth following their path can result in the destruction of ethical values of a society. For instance, Sanjay Dutt, Bollywood Actor is well known for his money and roles as a villain, his terrorist acts in different movies have given rise to violence and crime in streets of Mumbai, all these were committed by adolescents for thrill and adventure. To recapitulate, the aforementioned provides plausible arguments in favour of both views. There is no doubt that famous people have their influence, as youth is not mature and in the growing phase of their life. However, one should not criticise the celebrities as it depends on the young people how they perceive and take it forward.
Sample response & feedback
Celebrity Glamour, Wealth, and Impact on Youth
Question
Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth than for their achievements, and this sets a bad example for young people. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Annotated response
18 correction notes
Overall assessment
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response offers a recognisable two-sided argument and a reasonable vocabulary range. Its qualified disagreement is stated, but the discussion focuses mainly on celebrity influence rather than whether wealth overshadows achievement. Unsupported claims weaken the examples, while the single paragraph and unclear references make the argument harder to follow. The conclusion needs to connect its view of individual responsibility more directly to both claims in the question.
IELTS criteria
How each score was decided
TR Task Response
6.0The response gives a qualified disagreement and considers positive and negative celebrity influence. However, it develops the effects of imitation more than the comparison between wealth and achievements, and its examples make unsupported claims about social outcomes.
CC Coherence and Cohesion
6.0The argument moves recognisably from an introduction to positive and negative examples and a conclusion, but all of these stages are presented in one paragraph. Unclear pronoun references and the transition “On the contrary” also weaken cohesion.
LR Lexical Resource
6.0There is adequate vocabulary range, including attempts at less common items such as “recapitulate” and “idealising”. However, expressions such as “get their glimpse”, “follow their footprint” and “displaying the same act” show imprecise collocation.
GRA Grammatical Range and Accuracy
6.0The response uses simple and complex structures, but faulty result clauses, malformed verb constructions and comma splices recur. These errors generally leave the intended argument understandable, although the longer sentences become difficult to follow.