Older and Younger Workers Competing for Jobs

Both problems and solutions are discussed, but competition itself is repeatedly presented as a consequence. The opening shifts the prompt’s emphasis to younger applicants, and the proposed roles need a clearer link to older people seeking employment.

There is a clear overall structure with logical paragraphing and linking devices, though progression within paragraphs is somewhat mechanical and ideas are occasionally repeated.

Vocabulary is generally adequate for the topic with some appropriate items like unemployment insurance and traineeships, but word choice is sometimes awkward and key phrases are noticeably repetitive.

Simple and complex sentences convey the main ideas, but errors in subject–verb order, singular and plural forms, clause construction, comparisons and articles reduce accuracy.

The response addresses both the problems and the solutions with a relevant position and examples, but the ideas are only partially developed because the response falls 45 words short of the minimum length.

Paragraphing is logical, progression is clear from problem to solution to conclusion, and cohesive devices are used naturally throughout.

Vocabulary is flexible and mostly precise, with good collocations such as reskilling, age diversity, and workplace friction, and only occasional less precise phrasing.

A wide range of sentence structures is used with good control, and errors are rare and non-impeding.

Both questions are addressed, but reduced productivity is not clearly shown to result from job competition. The youth-crime claim needs qualification, and the fast-track scheme needs a clearer connection to recruitment rather than promotion.

Ideas progress logically across well-organised paragraphs with generally effective cohesive devices, though a few linkers like 'as a result' and 'Besides' are used mechanically.

A sufficient range of topic-related vocabulary is demonstrated, but some imprecise or awkward expressions such as 'significant attitude', 'spoiling, killing' and 'non-experienced' reduce accuracy.

Complex structures include concessive clauses, relative clauses and inversion. Most sentences are grammatically controlled, although cumbersome phrasing sometimes reduces clarity; the more prominent weaknesses concern vocabulary and argument development.

The response addresses problems and solutions for both age groups with relevant ideas. However, the older-worker discussion focuses on existing employees rather than older jobseekers, and the proposed solutions need clearer links to the problems they are intended to solve.

Ideas progress logically through clear problem and solution paragraphs with effective cohesive devices like 'Meanwhile' and 'With regard to', though some linking is slightly mechanical.

Vocabulary is sufficiently varied, with useful expressions such as “entry barrier” and “mentor their younger counterparts”. Occasional awkward combinations, including “employable skills” and “contest each other for”, reduce precision without obscuring the message.

A variety of complex structures are used with generally good control. Minor punctuation slips, such as spaces before a comma and a full stop, and the shift from “puts” to “would end up” reduce consistency without preventing understanding.

The response presents a clear position, develops problems and solutions with relevant explanation and examples, though the problems focus on workplace culture rather than the job competition itself, slightly narrowing coverage.

Ideas progress logically across well-managed paragraphs with varied cohesive devices and clear referencing, with only occasional imperfect cohesion such as the slightly loose link between competition and morale.

Vocabulary is wide and often precise, including “toxic workplace culture”, “animosity” and “hampered”. A few combinations, such as “dissolving tensions” and “setting a relaxed atmosphere”, could be made more conventional.

A wide range of complex structures is used with flexibility and accuracy, including well-formed conditionals and relative clauses, with errors rare and non-impeding.

The response addresses both parts of the task with a clear problem (poverty among older workers) and a relevant solution (lowering the retirement age), supported by examples, though the counterpoint about wealthier seniors slightly dilutes the argument's consistency.

Ideas progress logically through well-organised paragraphs with a clear overview, effective referencing, and appropriate cohesive devices, with only minor local tension in the concession.

Vocabulary is flexible and precise, including natural collocations such as 'stiffer competition', 'left on the scrapheap', and 'insulated from these troubles', with only rare lapses in register.

A wide range of sentence structures is used with generally good control, including conditional and relative clauses. Local lapses include the ambiguous coordination in “a young and old person” and the misplaced comma in “and therefore, are”.

Both questions are addressed with relevant problems and solutions, but the links between job competition, workplace tension and the outcomes of the proposed measures need fuller explanation.

Ideas progress logically across well-organised paragraphs with effective use of cohesive devices and clear referencing.

Vocabulary is precise and natural, including less common items such as ageism, intergenerational tension, and reverse mentorship, used with only rare imprecision.

A wide range of grammatical structures, including complex subordination and participial phrases, is used accurately and flexibly with very few errors.

The essay fully addresses both the problems and solutions, maintains a consistent position, and develops each main idea with relevant explanation and examples.

Paragraphing is logical and progression is clear throughout, with effective use of cohesive devices such as referencing and linking phrases that never feel mechanical.

Vocabulary is flexible and precise in places, including items like ameliorate, up-to-date qualifications, and recruitment practices, though the range is not consistently sophisticated.

Complex sentences, relative clauses and a conditional are generally well controlled. Minor errors, including “on an equal footing to”, do not obscure the argument.

The response proposes free further education as a solution, but the thesis and first body discussion mainly explain why competition arises rather than developing its consequences. The Germany example asserts success without specifying a relevant outcome, so the support needs clearer development.

The response has a clear introduction, body sequence and conclusion, with cohesive devices such as “whereas” and “thus”. However, the claim that young applicants pose “no real threat” and the warning about excess graduates are not reconciled with the argument for intervention.

Vocabulary is flexible and precise, including natural items like 'stiffer competition', 'a glut of graduates', and 'exacerbate the problem', with only a minor awkward phrase such as 'lots of time on the job'.

A wide range of structures is used with generally strong control, including result clauses, contrasts and a correlative “not only … but also” construction. A local error occurs in “between 18-25 years old”, which mixes two age-range patterns.