Causes and Solutions for Increasing Youth Crime

Both parts of the question are addressed with relevant causes and solutions, but the solutions are underdeveloped, and the conclusion omits the economic cause while referring to unexplained school factors.

The essay is logically organised with clear paragraphing and cohesive devices, though some linkers are used mechanically and progression within the solution paragraph is weak.

There is adequate range of topic-related vocabulary, but phrases such as 'unemployment inflation' and 'two square meals' are imprecise or misapplied in context.

A mix of simple and complex structures generally communicates meaning clearly. Subordination in sentences about parents and children is mostly controlled; the malformed combination “unemployment inflation is” needs restructuring to name the two intended factors.

The response addresses both questions with relevant causes and plausible solutions, though the link from seeking acceptance to offending is left implicit and several preventive measures are listed without explaining how they work.

Paragraphing is logical and sequencing is broadly clear, though some cohesion devices are mechanical and sentence linkages occasionally read awkwardly.

Vocabulary shows adequate range for the topic, including some precise collocations, though phrasing is occasionally unnatural or repetitive.

A variety of complex structures is attempted, but errors such as “people collectively being responsible” and the unclear subject in “With the guidance of families ... it will help” weaken sentence control.