The response covers all four sports, gives a clear overview of the main trends, and makes relevant comparisons, but the detail paragraph misdates the data by attributing the 1985 rugby and tennis figures to 1995, an occasional content inaccuracy.
7.0Ideas are arranged logically across an introduction, overview and detail paragraphs. The contrast between sports is clear, although the overview sentence would flow more directly with fewer linking expressions.
7.0Vocabulary is sufficiently flexible for the task, with apt expressions such as took the lead, plunged and hovering around. However, “participation rates” is imprecise for absolute counts, and “respectively” would pair the figures more accurately than “in turn”.
7.0GRAGrammatical Range and Accuracy
Complex sentences, participial phrases and with-clauses are used with generally good control. For example, the final paragraph combines the main trend with “hitting a low” and “with its participation rates increasing”, showing a range of structures.
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