Participants in Melbourne Social Centre Activities (2000–2020)

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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Key features: Participants in Melbourne Social Centre Activities (2000–2020)

WhyThis is aLine graph — it asks you to report the main trends and changes over time.

SoWe split the points intoOverview(the main trends over the period)andKey features(figures and comparisons worth reporting).

Overview

3 points

Key features

7 points

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Response 01
Estimated band6.5/ 9

Overall assessment

The response is well organised with a clear overview and fluent, accurate language throughout. Its main weakness is data accuracy: several figures and trends misread the graph, including table tennis, martial arts, and amateur dramatics, which undermines the reliability of the report.

TA

Task Achievement

The response covers all five activities, provides an overview, and uses appropriate length, but multiple data points and trends are inaccurate against the graph, such as table tennis rising to about 53 rather than 25, martial arts ending near 36 rather than declining to 25, and amateur dramatics falling to about 6 by 2020.

5.5
CC

Coherence and Cohesion

The report is logically organised with clear paragraphing, a summarising introduction, a body of trend descriptions, and a cohesive concluding summary using linkers such as 'while' and 'in contrast'.

7.0
LR

Lexical Resource

Vocabulary is sufficiently flexible and precise for describing trends, with phrases like 'consistently had the highest number', 'significant growth', and 'a slight upward trend', with only a minor spelling slip ('center').

7.0
GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

A good range of structures is used accurately, including relative and participle clauses ('starting at around 60', 'before falling to 15') and varied tense forms, with only rare, non-impeding errors such as 'saw declines'.

7.0

What to work on next

Re-check every plotted value and trend against the graph before writing, as several reported figures diverge substantially from the visual data.

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