Overseas Visitors to the UK by Purpose

The response covers all three categories with a clear overview and largely accurate figures, but includes an unsupported claim that business briefly overtook personal visits and a slightly overstated final business figure of 7.5 million against the graph's roughly 7 million.

Ideas progress logically from an overview to initial figures and then the subsequent trends. Cohesion is effective, although the long opening comparison could be streamlined and the closing sentence largely repeats holiday dominance.

Vocabulary is flexible and generally precise, with a varied range of terms including peaked, dipping, contingent and pre-eminence. Some elaborate phrasing could be made more concise to sharpen the numerical comparisons.

A wide range of complex structures, coordinated clauses and participial constructions is handled accurately. Sentences remain grammatically controlled despite their length, and any errors are rare and non-impeding.

The response covers all three purposes over the full period, provides a clear overview of the main trends and comparisons, and reports data that is mostly accurate with only minor approximate readings.

Ideas progress logically from overview to detail, paragraphing is effective, and cohesive devices such as comparisons and referencing are used naturally throughout.

Vocabulary is varied and generally precise, with effective trend verbs such as surged, slipped and eased. The hyphenated out-paced needs standard spelling, and the final business decline could be expressed more directly.

A wide range of structures is used with strong control, including subordinate clauses, coordinated comparisons and participial constructions; grammatical errors are rare and do not impede meaning.