The response covers all six sources and identifies oil as the largest contributor in both years. However, it gives the 1985 oil share as 59% rather than 52% and describes the 2003 coal share as two fifths rather than 22%. The overview would be stronger if it also summarised the main increases and decreases.
6.0The introduction, overview and two detail paragraphs provide a logical sequence. However, openings such as “Having a deep look” and “Moving forward to the rest description” are mechanical, and “which reduced” leaves the reference to the nuclear share unclear.
7.0There is adequate lexical range for describing proportions and trends, but imprecise collocations such as 'participating in less ratio' and 'noticed for' reduce flexibility and accuracy.
6.0GRAGrammatical Range and Accuracy
Simple and complex structures are attempted, but errors such as “which were occurred”, “was decreased” and “13% and 23% noticed” show problems with verb forms and complete clauses, despite generally recoverable meaning.
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