Employment Patterns in New Zealand in 1993 and 2003

The table below shows employment patterns for males and females in New Zealand in 1993 and 2003.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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Key features: Employment Patterns in New Zealand in 1993 and 2003

WhyThis is aTable — it asks you to group and compare the key figures.

SoWe split the points intoOverview(the main patterns in the table)andKey features(figures and comparisons worth reporting).

Overview

3 points

Key features

11 points

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Response 01
Estimated band5.5/ 9

Overall assessment

The response covers all six sectors for both genders and includes several accurate numerical comparisons. It meets the minimum length, but its overview remains general and some important changes lack supporting figures. Frequent grammatical errors, including “the table show” and “it go down”, reduce control, while repetitive vocabulary and separate gender descriptions limit the precision of the comparisons.

TA

Task Achievement

The response mentions all six sectors for both genders and reports several accurate figures. However, the overview does not identify the principal trends, and several changes remain unquantified, especially in the male description. The answer meets the 150-word minimum.

6.0
CC

Coherence and Cohesion

Information is grouped by gender with a generally clear progression, though cohesion is mechanical, relying on simple linkers such as 'also' and 'but'.

6.0
LR

Lexical Resource

Vocabulary is adequate for describing the data but repetitive and restricted, with limited paraphrase and imprecise phrasing such as 'social service is more also'.

5.0
GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

Meaning is mostly clear, but frequent errors in subject-verb agreement and tense, for example 'the table show' and 'it go down', show limited grammatical control.

5.0

What to work on next

Write a specific overview naming business growth and the sharp male agricultural decline. Support the unquantified male trends with selected figures, add a direct comparison between genders, and check past-tense verbs and subject–verb agreement.

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