The response covers all six sectors with a clear overview and mostly accurate values. However, “outnumbered” wrongly infers headcounts from separate workforce shares, and percentage-point gaps are labelled as percentages. The final rankings are mostly clear, but the steep fall in male agriculture is not made explicit.
8.0Ideas progress logically from overview to year-by-year detail with effective linking devices like 'in contrast' and 'on the other hand', though a few connectives such as 'in turn' are used inaccurately.
7.0Vocabulary is varied and generally suitable for trend reporting, but “outnumbered” implies unsupported headcounts, “employment rates” misnames sector workforce shares, and “in turn” does not clearly pair the figures with the genders. These choices reduce precision despite an otherwise flexible range.
7.0GRAGrammatical Range and Accuracy
A range of complex structures is used with generally good control, including participle clauses and relative constructions. Occasional problems include the past-time tense slip “become” and the nonparallel comparison between “17% of male workers” and “females”.
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