It is generally believed that there are many health and environmental benefits to vegetarianism. While I do agree with this view, I do not think that vegetarianism is for everyone. The consumption of animal products certainly has some health consequences. It hurts the environment as well. Some studies have shown that vegetarians tend to live longer than their meat or fish-eating counterparts. The environmental impacts of non-vegetarianism are even worse. Countless animals are raised, abused and slaughtered to fulfil the demand for meat and fish worldwide. is one of the major causes of greenhouse gas emissions worldwide. If we can reduce the consumption of meat, the need for raising more animals also reduces. As a result, the land that is being used to raise them can be altered to grow vegetables which in turn produce clean air for the whole planet. Obviously, cutting down on the consumption of animal products benefits the whole world. However, meat and fish are an integral part of many cuisines; therefore, being a vegetarian is not an option in many regions of the world. To illustrate, sushi is the most popular Japanese delicacy and without the addition of its main ingredient, fish, sushi will not be complete. Meat consumption is particularly common in cold countries. There are also some regions where it is difficult to grow vegetables and cereals. Furthermore, fish and meat are excellent sources of proteins and some fatty acids crucial for good health. , meat consumption is essential for people engaging in strenuous physical activities. Being vegetarian, for example, is not a viable option for a bodybuilder or an athlete. In conclusion, even though there are advantages to vegetarianism, I believe that this lifestyle is not for everyone. Even so, in my opinion, everyone should make an effort to cut down on their consumption of animal foods. That way they can improve their health and save the planet from tons of greenhouse gases.
Vegetarianism for Personal Health and Global Benefits
Some people choose to eat no meat or fish. They believe that this is not only better for their own health but also benefits the world as a whole. Discuss this viewpoint and give your own opinion.
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Overall assessment
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response presents a clear qualified position and develops ideas about health, the environment and practical considerations. However, it is written as one continuous paragraph, weakening the organisation of these points. Some categorical claims need fuller support, while inaccurate word choices such as "Framing livestock" and "For this season" reduce precision.
IELTS criteria
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Task Response
7.0The response discusses health and environmental benefits and gives a clear qualified position that vegetarianism is not suitable for everyone. Relevant examples support the discussion, but some claims about cultural or physical requirements are categorical and need fuller justification.
Coherence and Cohesion
5.5The argument has an understandable sequence, but the entire essay is one continuous paragraph. The benefits, qualifications and final recommendation need separate grouping to make the progression easier to follow. Some links also rely on repeated sequencing phrases.
Lexical Resource
6.5Vocabulary is generally adequate and flexible for the topic, with some precise phrases, but occasional wrong word choices like 'Framing livestock' and 'For this season' reduce precision.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
7.0A range of complex and conditional structures is used with generally good control and clear meaning. The phrase "sushi will not be complete" is grammatically well formed; concerns about that example relate to the support for the claim, rather than its verb construction.