Vegetarianism for Personal Health and Global Benefits

Some people choose to eat no meat or fish. They believe that this is not only better for their own health but also benefits the world as a whole. Discuss this viewpoint and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, people are free to related to food. Some of them argue that a fundamentally beneficial influence on our planet and own life, while many others contend that it has a detrimental effect as well. , meat and fish are one of the most important foods for our normal health condition, so it is harmful to refuse it absolutely.

Firstly, meat and fish provide a lot of useful vitamins. It is extremely necessary for our normal vital processes growing or maturing. causes serious disabilities. Moreover, the should be regulated due to the shortage of feed in the water and earth, which is needed. On the other hand, the destruction of fish and animal could cause disappearance of specific species. For instance, there are a lot of special species of fish that are written into a red book but . This negative aspect provides which should be solved globally.

In my opinion, people should not refuse it totally because it has a negative influence on their health. that this problem could be solved by a smaller quantity of meat and fish. This solution guarantees a these products and a positive effect on the balance of living organisms on earth.

Taking these points into consideration, I would like to say that eating meat and fish. However, in my opinion, the supply of this product should be regulated very carefully saving the balance of these organisms, but nobody should refuse this material wholly .

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.0

The response takes a clear position that moderate consumption is preferable to complete avoidance, and it organises the essay into recognisable paragraphs. Its main limitation is imprecise vocabulary and grammar that frequently blur the intended meaning, while some supporting ideas, such as the argument about species regulation, are underdeveloped or confusing.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Response

6.0

The response addresses the task with a clear opinion favouring moderate meat and fish consumption, but several main ideas, such as the species-regulation argument, are developed unevenly and lack clarity or full support.

Coherence and Cohesion

6.0

Paragraphing and overall progression are broadly logical with some linking devices, yet cohesion within paragraphs is sometimes weak and a few statements connect poorly to the surrounding ideas.

Lexical Resource

5.5

Vocabulary is adequate for the topic but limited in range, with noticeable errors of collocation and word choice such as 'harmful acquaintances' and 'smaller request' that obscure meaning at times.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

5.5

A mix of simple and complex structures is attempted, but frequent errors in agreement, article use, and verb forms occur while the central meaning usually remains recoverable.