Vegetarianism for Personal Health and Global Benefits

Some people choose to eat no meat or fish. They believe that this is not only better for their own health but also benefits the world as a whole. Discuss this viewpoint and give your own opinion.

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A healthy diet plays a very important role in maintaining people’s health. Some people argue that we should eat no fish and meat and . In my opinion, I agree that this will bring many advantages but also causes several drawbacks.

First of all, it is undeniable that by dint of eating like a vegetarian, people will have a nice body and more chance to avoid several chronic diseases. To specify, vegetables and fruits, which contain a rich source of vitamins and minerals, will enable people to . Moreover, with a low amount of fats, cholesterol, or saturated fats, people will not have to worry about gaining weight or obesity as well as other related health issues like high blood pressure or heart diseases. For example, since I ate more vegetables, my body became stronger and my weight stayed unchanged over time.

On the contrary, it is obvious that by no means could this kind of diet have no negative effect on our health and life styles… As a consequence of eating no meat and fish, people will not gain sufficient proteins and fats so that they will not have enough energy for their daily activities. For instance, my mother try to eat as a vegetarian in several days, but she always feel tired and can not perform anything well.

On the other hand, thanks to the vegetarian meals we can contribute to save the world. , the fact is that every year, the food processing industry consumes a large amount of clean water to produce meat or beef and release tons of waste and smoke to the environment. Additionally, due to the over fishing for food, many species of fish are endangered and . Therefore, if we remove meat and fish from our meal, we can prevent this.

In conclusion, it is not always good if we only eat vegetables but we should reduce the amount of meat and fish as well as eat more vegetables for healthier living.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.0

The response consistently presents a qualified position: it recognises benefits and drawbacks and recommends reducing meat and fish rather than eliminating them. Relevant ideas and personal examples support the discussion. However, some claims are overgeneralised, and recurring grammatical errors, imprecise wording and mechanical links reduce the clarity and persuasiveness of the reasoning.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Response

6.5

The response discusses health and environmental benefits as well as possible drawbacks, and consistently recommends reducing rather than eliminating meat and fish. Relevant personal examples are included, but some general claims about nutritional effects need clearer explanation and qualification.

Coherence and Cohesion

6.0

Paragraphing is logical and progression is broadly clear, but cohesive devices are at times mechanical or misused, and an informal ellipsis interrupts the flow.

Lexical Resource

6.0

The response shows an adequate range of vocabulary for the topic, with some attempts at less common expressions, though occasional inaccurate collocations and word choices reduce precision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6.0

A mix of simple and complex sentence forms is used with some flexibility, but errors in subject-verb agreement, verb forms, and prepositions recur across the response.