Vegetarianism for Personal Health and Global Benefits

Some people choose to eat no meat or fish. They believe that this is not only better for their own health but also benefits the world as a whole. Discuss this viewpoint and give your own opinion.

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in a community may depend on various factors, for example the traditions of the country, the wealth of the country, the religion or the age group. Therefore, the reasons why people choose to exclude meat and fish from their diet may also vary. Some people become vegetarian because they believe that this will benefit their health. Undoubtedly, eating too much meat, especially too much red meat, is not to be recommended. Moreover, the fact that there are healthy populations in some parts of the world where no one eats meat proves that it is not, as some people claim, an essential part of the human diet. However, it is important to ensure that enough protein, for example, is included in the diet from other sources. Where vegetarianism is not a tradition, this may require some careful planning. In my experience, it is quite common for people to become vegetarians because they feel that it is selfish to eat meat or because meat production increases global warming. They may also feel that if no one ate meat, there would be no food shortage, because meat production uses up food resources. This idealistic point of view is very attractive, but it is hard to judge whether it is in fact correct. In some families, if a teenager decides to become a vegetarian, they may do so partly out of a spirit of rebellion, because this behaviour can be interpreted as a criticism of their parents’ way of life. However, provided that they continue to eat healthily, the parents should not raise objections, in my opinion. Vegetarianism is a valid choice in life. Moreover, research shows that vegetarians tend to be healthier in many ways than meat-eaters. Personally, I think that being a vegetarian is a good idea in principle as there are proven health benefits and probably social benefits as well. However, it does not suit everybody, and I doubt whether it will ever be a universal choice.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 8.0

The response addresses the task directly, weighing health and global arguments before giving a nuanced personal position. Its strongest feature is the well-controlled, flexible language with natural cohesive flow, while the main limitation is that some exploration of motivations, such as teenage rebellion, drifts from the core argument about health and worldwide benefits.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Response

8.0

The viewpoint is fully discussed with developed health and global-warming arguments, and a clear, qualified personal opinion is sustained throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion

7.5

Progression is logical with effective paragraphing and cohesive devices, though the passage on teenage rebellion is a somewhat tangential detour from the central argument.

Lexical Resource

7.5

Vocabulary is precise and natural, with good collocations such as food resources and valid choice, but it is not consistently ambitious or rare in range.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

8.0

A wide range of complex structures is used flexibly and accurately, including conditionals and concessive clauses, with only rare minor slips.