Importance of Having at Least One Hobby

It is important for children, young adults, working people and the retired to have at least one hobby. What's your opinion about this?

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The question of whether people of all ages should have a certain hobby is a controversial topic of debate. that hobbies can help a person to . hobbies can be imposed by force or I believe hobbies play an integral part in a person's life, .

To commence with, it is essential to have a hobby which a person finds fascinating, creative and relaxing. , from age to age. During childhood, kids have several adults enjoy excessive sports and adventures. For example you can't expect to at the age of 75 because that's not the correct time or age. In old age elders face various health problems like knee pain, difficulty in walking, loneliness, etc.

Another main reason to additional activities is to relieve stress, . In this modern era, we all need . Other than such as Netflix, Prime. Instead of wasting time on one can divert their . more fascinating as they can feel more lively, forgetting loneliness.

Therefore, in my opinion, hobbies play an important role in a bring out for the individual . Government should also encourage activities for all age groups at libraries and city centres.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.0

The response addresses the opinion task with a clear position and relevant supporting reasons across age groups, reaching the required length. Its strongest aspect is sustained relevance with some concrete illustration of age-appropriate hobbies. The main limitation is unevenly developed ideas and frequent grammatical and word-form errors that occasionally strain clarity.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Response

6.0

The response presents a clear opinion and relevant main ideas about hobbies across age groups, but development is uneven and some support, such as the hiking example, is underexplored.

Coherence and Cohesion

6.0

Paragraphing is logical and cohesive devices are used, though some linking is mechanical or inaccurate, including awkward connectors like 'Although, it has been advised'.

Lexical Resource

6.0

Vocabulary is generally adequate for discussing hobbies, with useful expressions such as 'relieve stress' and 'bring out creativity'. However, word choice, collocation and word-form errors, including 'unaccountable advantages', 'invest our extra time' and 'social medias', reduce precision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6.0

A mix of sentence types is attempted, but frequent errors in agreement, articles, and punctuation, such as 'interests differs' and 'Elders finds', reduce overall grammatical accuracy.