Some people think that computers have made our life , while others believe that computers have more disadvantages than advantages. This essay will discuss both sides of this issue. The most important advantage of computers is that they make our life easier, how? you may ask! The application of the computer in our daily life is endless. For instance, you can buy whatever you want by clicking on a button (online shopping). Furthermore, currently, people are working at home due to computer technologies. In addition to this, it helps us to who are staying far away. The communication efficiency is really great while the cost is quite low. Finally, it has made our life more interesting, you can download your preferred music, movie etc. or play video games with your friends online and most importantly whenever you want. Not only in daily life but also at work, computers are playing . People just have to control and the computer will do another job. In big factories, almost all jobs are done by computers and employees just have to . Not only factories can be an example of the usefulness of computers, in banks your property is also secured by computers, which makes the life of bankers more convenient. But there are certain disadvantages of computers. Aforesaid computer games among children. For instance: a lot of schoolboys because of computers. They simply can't ; they just can't live without computers anymore. Moreover, not only addiction but also is caused by computer. A lot of time people are spent in front of the computer, which really hurts their eyes. Not only illness can be said about the bad side of computers, above-named banks from so-called "phishing", hackers simply are stealing money from the banks, by just breaking or finding the necessary codes for this. Also in factories, computers are doing a lot of things but only one hitch in one sector and it will stop the whole factory. In conclusion, in my view, of our life, but we should be very careful about using them appropriately.
Do Computers Make Life Easier or More Stressful
While some people opine that computers have made our life more convenient and easier, others, however, oppose it and say that computers have actually made our life more complex and stressful. What is your opinion on this?
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Overall assessment
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response addresses both views and ends with a clear personal position, supported by a range of everyday examples. Its main strengths are relevant, well-developed supporting points, while the main limitation is frequent grammatical inaccuracy and an overly mechanical, formulaic style that weakens the overall impression.
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Task Response
6.0The essay covers both perspectives with relevant examples and reaches a clear personal opinion, but the position is introduced late and some arguments, such as the factory and banking points, are unevenly developed.
Coherence and Cohesion
6.0Ideas are arranged in a broadly logical sequence with basic linking devices, yet cohesion is mechanical and occasionally breaks down, as in the abrupt 'how? you may ask!' insertion.
Lexical Resource
6.0Vocabulary is adequate for the task with some attempts at less common items like 'phishing' and 'addiction', but there are awkward or inaccurate collocations such as 'communication our relatives' and 'Aforesaid computer games'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
5.5A mix of simple and complex structures is attempted, but frequent errors in verb forms, articles, and agreement, for example 'aren't gone to school' and 'a lot of time people are spent', reduce accuracy and at times obscure meaning.
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