In this century, computers are considered as the most revolutionary invention for the development of human beings. However, there are some people concerned about the complexity and stressfulness that come along with the . Personally, I am in favour of the view that the high-tech products bring people more convenience and . Granted, the unhealthy use of computers like indulgence in computer games and the illegal use make the living surroundings more complex and even stressful. Nevertheless, no garden without weed, it is the computers that enhance our communication, facilitate daily work and study, and lower the living cost. When it comes to the benefits computers bring about, at least three obvious aspects should be mentioned. Firstly, as a way of telecommunication, no one can deny that computers enhance the interaction between people. Specifically, compared with traditional letters and telegraphs, emails and online chatting allow overseas students their parents in a more timely and easy manner without considering the geographic limitations. Secondly, improves the efficiency of both work and study since the internet helps to get access to and knowledge that no professionals or teachers could provide during their whole lifetime. Lastly, from the perspective of family budgets, PCs contribute largely to lower the living cost and improve the . The main reason given for this is that after checking and comparing prices online, the users can always choose the most economical products. To conclude, although computers exert some undesirable effects on , they are still the our daily life easier and more convenient.
Do Computers Make Life Easier or More Stressful
While some people opine that computers have made our life more convenient and easier, others, however, oppose it and say that computers have actually made our life more complex and stressful. What is your opinion on this?
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Overall assessment
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response gives a clear opinion and supports it with relevant points about communication, access to information and costs. The discussion has an understandable sequence, but it is all in one paragraph. Recurring grammar errors and awkward collocations also limit accuracy and precision despite the use of some complex structures.
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Task Response
7.0The essay fully answers the opinion question with a clear position, addresses the opposing view through a concession, and develops three relevant supporting ideas with examples.
Coherence and Cohesion
5.5The response follows an understandable sequence from a concession through three benefits to a conclusion. However, it is presented as one continuous paragraph, and mechanical signposting takes the place of clearly separated groups of ideas.
Lexical Resource
6.5Vocabulary is adequate for discussing computers and includes some precise topic language. However, expressions such as "the computer using", "living surroundings" and "life quality" are awkward or imprecise, limiting consistent control of collocation.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
6.0Several complex structures are attempted and meaning is generally clear, but errors recur in articles, verb complements and uncountable nouns. Examples include "much easier life", "allow overseas students contact" and "numerous information".
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