It is true that countless individuals are eager to participate in adventurous sports even though they are aware of the risks involved. There are various reasons for this; however, certain safety measures, if adopted and followed, can mitigate the dangers associated with these sports. To begin with, one of the predominant reasons for the popularity of some dangerous sports such as paragliding, bungee jumping and scuba diving is that people tend to take part in these sports to overcome and conquer their phobias and fears. Many people suffer from aquaphobia and acrophobia, and to free themselves from these fears, they indulge in some adventurous yet life-threatening sports. These sports, they believe, will boost their confidence and make them intrepid. To exemplify this, I was extremely afraid of heights but to overcome this fear, I did paragliding not only once but thrice in a row on the same day even though I was aware of the risks involved. I am no longer afraid of tall buildings and extreme heights. Moreover, people have after doing these sports. They feel more alive and younger. To mitigate the dangers involved in these sports, the most effective measure is to use proper and equipment such as harness, ropes and specialized clothing. Before doing the sport, the participants should be checked thoroughly to ensure that their specialized safety kit and gear is functioning properly. This practice, therefore, would reduce the risks involved. In addition to what has been mentioned, the specialists and experienced professionals should provide 1-2 days of training to interested participants to avoid any dangers. For example, before doing sky-diving, the professionals provide 2 days of coaching to the people who are going to take part in it. Moreover, participating in these hazardous sports must be avoided in extreme weather conditions, such as during rain and thunderstorms. In conclusion, from a quick analysis of the situation, it is quite evident that people are inclined towards precarious sports as to conquer their fears. Undoubtedly, the dangers associated with these sports can be significantly reduced by taking proper safety measures
Dangerous Sports: Reasons and Safety Solutions
Some sports are extremely dangerous but many people still like them very much. Why do people take part in dangerous sports? Give some suggestions on how to deal with these dangers.
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Overall assessment
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response provides relevant motivations and several risk-reduction measures, with a developed example about overcoming fear. However, the entire essay is one paragraph, weakening organisation. The excitement motive is brief, and the claim about training avoiding any danger needs qualification. A stray closing bracket also remains at the end.
IELTS criteria
How each score was decided
Task Response
7.0The response addresses motivations and risk reduction with relevant examples and several measures. However, the excitement motive is only briefly developed, and the claim that one or two days of training can avoid any dangers is too categorical for the support provided.
Coherence and Cohesion
5.5The ideas have an understandable sequence, but the entire essay is one continuous paragraph. The reasons, examples and safety measures need separate grouping, and several formulaic links do not compensate for the absence of paragraph organisation.
Lexical Resource
7.0Vocabulary is flexible and precise, showing good awareness of style and collocation with only rare, minor slips such as the plural form 'safety gears'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
7.0A wide range of complex structures is used with generally good control, and errors are infrequent and rarely impede meaning.