Dangerous Sports: Reasons and Safety Solutions

Some sports are extremely dangerous but many people still like them very much. Why do people take part in dangerous sports? Give some suggestions on how to deal with these dangers.

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Sports and adventure have always intrigued and beguiled humans since time immemorial, even their security which makes it a very contentious . Some sports activities are extremely hazardous to human beings and still manage to entrance many people. In this essay, we shall talk about the possible causes of this tendency and the solutions to curb the dangers due to sports.

The main reason that has beguiled human beings is their visceral predilection towards exploratory activities. The human brain has always caused them to behave in a certain way that entrances them to perform certain considerably precarious tasks, even if that means jeopardising their lives. For instance, in the conquest of of Mt. Everest, many people succumbed to death, and even that didn’t cease people from conquering its peak time and again. Moreover, adventure sports like white water rafting and mountain climbing have always been propagated as a daunting task to do which is not a cakewalk for normal people. This has made even more people to go ahead and demonstrate their valiance and mettle in order to prove their and indomitable spirit to the world. Other than that, money and economic reward is yet another reason.

Talking about the solutions that could be diacatholicon to check this menace would be to, first of all, educate the sports enthusiast or anyone who wishes to foray into the domain of dangerous sports of the possible dire consequences of such perilous sports. Other than that, making people aware of the proper precautionary measures can help assuage the risk of such threatening sports. For instance, people who wish to do bungee jumping could be made well-cognizant of the associated risks that could be proven minacious for the lives of the ones looking forward to attempting it. Above all, people for whom money is the major bait to should be educated and counselled about how life is the most prized possession they could ever have and hence, they should be vigilant of what they pick and choose.

Hence, we may conclusively say that though there are innumerable causes that enchant people to pass through the gates of risk and adventures, there are certainly some possible solutions that could help people in .

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.5

The response addresses both parts of the task, giving reasons for participation in dangerous sports and several safety-related suggestions, with relevant examples such as Everest and bungee jumping. The strongest aspect is the flexible sentence structure and clear overall organisation; the main limitation is the frequent, strained misuse of rare vocabulary, which occasionally obscures meaning.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Response

6.5

The response addresses both questions with a clear purpose and relevant supporting examples, though some ideas are padded and development of the financial-motivation point and solutions remains somewhat uneven.

Coherence and Cohesion

6.5

Progression is generally clear across cause and solution sections, but cohesion relies on mechanical linkers such as 'Other than that' and 'Talking about', and some sentences read as loosely connected.

Lexical Resource

6.0

There is an ambitious range of less common vocabulary, but repeated misuse and improbable collocations, such as 'diacatholicon', 'prove their candour', and 'enchant people', reduce precision and occasionally impede clarity.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6.5

A variety of complex structures is used with generally good control, though errors like 'made even more people to go ahead' and some awkward constructions show flexibility is not always accurate.