Dangerous Sports: Reasons and Safety Solutions

Some sports are extremely dangerous but many people still like them very much. Why do people take part in dangerous sports? Give some suggestions on how to deal with these dangers.

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reason sometimes people love to do adventures and so they take part in such types of games. Furthermore, some people are very ambitious and they like to accept challenges in their life. For instance, Marry com is an Indian boxer and during the game but to take challenges. In addition to it, to participate in some because they gain some skills themselves.

Moreover, think that more profit. They take part in more risky games which help them to solve the Montery problem.Last but not the least, Dangerous games . They gain name and fame in short time in dangerous games.

There are some suggestions to deal with these games. Firstly professional training should be provided to people them to reduce the Government also implement some regarding to support and safety. Apart from that, handle it easily.

To put it in a nutshell, that games provide us enjoyment and help us to forget all our worries and anxieties but we should take proper training before participating in dangerous games.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 5.0

The response addresses both parts of the task, offering several plausible reasons for participating in dangerous sports and some practical safety suggestions, supported by a relevant example. However, the ideas remain thinly developed, the response is 30 words below the required length, and frequent grammatical and word-choice errors often strain communication.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Response

5.5

The response addresses both questions with relevant reasons (adventure-seeking, ambition, self-defence skills, money, publicity) and appropriate suggestions, but ideas are only partially developed, the Mary Kom example is brief, and the response falls short of the 250-word minimum.

Coherence and Cohesion

5.0

There is a visible overall structure with linking phrases and a conclusion, but progression is often mechanical, paragraphs are unevenly developed, and some statements (e.g. about profit and publicity) lack connected explanation.

Lexical Resource

5.0

Vocabulary is adequate for the topic with some attempted range (ambitious, publicity, regulation), but word-choice errors such as 'Montery problem', 'how to defined themselves', and 'awareness of dangerous' and inconsistent collocation limit precision and flexibility.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

5.0

A mix of simple and complex structures is attempted, but frequent errors in verb forms, articles, agreement, and sentence construction ('she injured so many time', 'Government also implement', 'help to people handle it') regularly reduce accuracy and clarity.