There are many extreme sports today such as , mountain climbing and water sports. Despite many risks associated with these sports, many people love them because of their adventure and risk-loving attitude, to feel the sense of achievement and to attain celebrity status thereby earning money through sponsorships. Since these risks come with a price tag, they need to take several precautions while playing these sports strict safety measures, learning from the experience of others and joining a group rather than attempting them individually. Many people today are ambitious because of the said reasons. For example, the number of people today trying to climb Mount Everest is on the rise. It makes them stronger mentally and physically by handling life-threatening risks . Apart from these reasons, some like this type of sports to earn celebrity status. Once they earn this privilege, they are respected by society and organisations pay them to become brand ambassadors. For example, a recent Mt. Everest climber has been selected as an icon of a famous trekking equipment maker. While adrenaline-raising sports are good, several precautions need to be taken while participating in them. Safety measures are most important because life is at stake. Having safety devices can save one from serious injuries. and suggested approach is to read blogs or books of people who succeeded and failed while trying them. It helps to form a list of what and what not to do. When these games are tried in a group, they can help each other during accidents and whenever an . In summary, as risks are associated with a price tag, strict precautions need to be in place to stay alive.
Dangerous Sports: Reasons and Safety Solutions
Some sports are extremely dangerous but many people still like them very much. Why do people take part in dangerous sports? Give some suggestions on how to deal with these dangers.
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Overall assessment
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response discusses relevant motivations and precautions, supported by examples involving Everest. However, it is presented as one continuous paragraph, which weakens the organisation of the two parts of the answer. Some points are repetitive or only briefly explained, and awkward wording and tense errors reduce precision.
IELTS criteria
How each score was decided
Task Response
6.0The response addresses both questions with a relevant set of reasons and suggestions, though some ideas are listed rather than fully extended and the conclusion adds little.
Coherence and Cohesion
5.5The reasons and precautions follow an understandable order, but the whole essay is one continuous paragraph. This makes the move between motivations, examples and safety measures harder to follow, while references such as "the said reasons" remain vague.
Lexical Resource
6.0Vocabulary is adequate for the topic with some appropriate collocations, yet expressions like 'adrenaline-raising sports' and 'risks come with a price tag' show imprecision and repetition.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
6.0A mix of simple and complex sentences is used with generally clear meaning, but errors in articles, tense, and agreement, such as 'an obstacle struck', occur throughout.