Dangerous Sports: Reasons and Safety Solutions

Some sports are extremely dangerous but many people still like them very much. Why do people take part in dangerous sports? Give some suggestions on how to deal with these dangers.

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Some sports have a high level of risk. However, individuals still enjoy these activities due to their high adrenaline level and their popularity. In my opinion, it is still possible to handle these dangers by using proper equipment.

Firstly, some people like to be at risk by their nature. They like to take part in activities, which cause adrenaline in their bodies. They believe it is the most enjoyable thing to do in life. For example, my friend John is a professional boxer. in competitions. Although he gets hurt badly, he believes he can not quit boxing due to his high adrenaline level. This is one of the major reasons why people like to be a part of risky sports.

Secondly, in our societies. , some individuals like to . Graham is a rally racer. He mentions that his activity helps him get attention, especially among the opposite sex. Therefore he keeps on joining risky exhibitions.

In my opinion, these dangers can be controlled with appropriate . There are many products in order to protect people. For example in , manufacturers are creating strong helmets against hard hits. They are testing these products under laboratory conditions, moreover, they use extremely hard materials like fibre-plastic as a contributor.

In conclusion, it is a fact that people are going to continue to attend dangerous sports events because of their desire for adrenaline and popularity. I believe self-protection can be provided by choosing the correct equipment.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.5

The response addresses both questions with relevant personal examples and clear paragraphing. Its main limitation is that the motivations and equipment suggestion receive limited explanation. Some tense and punctuation choices reduce accuracy, while expressions such as attending sports events blur the distinction between participation and watching.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Response

6.5

The response addresses both questions with a clear position and relevant supporting examples, but ideas remain somewhat underdeveloped and the argument relies heavily on anecdote rather than extended analysis.

Coherence and Cohesion

6.0

Paragraphs give a clear sequence of two motivations, a safety suggestion and a conclusion. Some linking is mechanical, and moreover joins two independent clauses with commas where stronger sentence punctuation is needed. The statement about dangers being popular is an imprecise claim rather than a transition.

Lexical Resource

6.5

Vocabulary is adequate for the topic with some appropriate collocations like 'adrenaline level' and 'appropriate tools', though phrasing is occasionally imprecise or unnatural, as in 'dangers are quite popular'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6.5

A mix of simple and complex structures conveys the main ideas with reasonable control. "His nose is broken twice" uses an awkward tense for the two completed injuries described, and the sentence joined by moreover has faulty punctuation. "Attend dangerous sports events" is grammatical, although it does not clearly mean taking part.