Australian Beachfront Area Maps 1950 and Today

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The maps below show a beachfront area in Australia in 1950 and the same area today.

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a beachfront area in 1950 and presently in Australia.

Overall, the major changes are surrounding the beach where clubs and restaurants open now and the new road is made.

In 1950, and alongside that road was round shape play ground and dining tables. , and one was on the east side while another was on the west side of the beach. The pool was 25 meters long. Additionally, one pavilion was between car parking and dining tables, a small lighthouse beside the east pool.

Currently, we can see dramatic changes, primarily in the road. Now the road is not ending at car parking. It No change for dining tables and pavilion; however, small car parking takes the place of the playground. Another car park area is increased on the southwest side, pool dimensions double than 1950, One new advancement surf club is the backside of 50m pool, and one is the 25m pool backside.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.0

The response covers most key changes from both maps, including the road extension, new car parks, surf clubs, restaurant, and pool enlargement, showing reasonable content selection. Its main limitation is frequent grammatical inaccuracy and awkward, unclear expression that occasionally obscures the description of locations and changes.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Achievement

6.0

The response provides an overview of the main changes and describes most key features from both maps, including the road extension, car parks, restaurant, surf clubs, and the enlarged 50m pool, though phrasing such as 'one is the 25m pool backside' is imprecise and some details are expressed unclearly.

Coherence and Cohesion

6.0

Progression is broadly clear with an introduction, overview, and body paragraphs, but cohesive devices are mechanical and referencing is often weak, for example 'It developed to the lighthouse, and it's in u shape'.

Lexical Resource

6.0

Vocabulary is adequate for the task with some appropriate map language such as 'dramatic changes' and 'takes the place of', but it is limited and occasionally inaccurate in expressions like 'one new advancement surf club'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

5.5

A range of structures is attempted, but errors are frequent, including subject-verb agreement ('There was two same dimensions pool'), article omissions, and faulty constructions like 'pool dimensions double than 1950', which sometimes impede clarity.

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