Reasons and Disadvantages of Being Self-Employed

9 Sample Responses · Bands 6.5–7.5

Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Response 01

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Many individuals nowadays choose to work for themselves rather than being employed in an organisation. The main reason behind this preference is people’s freedom to work solo and independently. Having said that, there are advantages to working for oneself. However, the major disadvantage is that there is no guaranteed paycheck every month.

People doing corporate jobs often find it hard to balance their work and personal lives. In the past, there were not many rivalries among industries. Most workers were only compelled to work eight hours a day, which means they still had plenty of time left for themselves after work. Nevertheless, the competition is becoming more fierce with every passing day, and as a result, many employees had to toil harder and longer hours to help their employers thrive. For instance, at Facebook, engineers are often asked to work during the weekend to deliver new features to stay ahead of its competitors, such as TikTok and Snapchat. Thus, many people have leapt to self-employment, hoping they can have more control over their time. Additionally, being self-employed gives the freedom to pursue one’s passion and experiment with various avenues, which is impossible in nine-to-five jobs.

However, there are disadvantages to being self-employed too. Primarily, there is a considerable risk of failure of a venture at any point in time due to a lack of guidance, abilities, experience, and risk management. Occasionally, people cannot push their bottom lines and lose their entire investment. Eventually, they may end up with a complete failure which further triggers the health issues such as hypertension and cardiac problems.

Although to pen down, I would write that young adults are very inclined to establish their own business to become rich and lead a luxurious lifestyle. Even so, running a successful venture is not everyone’s cup of tea due to the various risks.

Score details

Response 01
Estimated band6.5/ 9

Overall assessment

The response addresses both parts of the task with relevant reasons and a concrete example, and its language is generally fluent. The main limitations are a muddled conclusion that does not clearly summarize the position and some imprecise or awkward phrasing in places.

TR

Task Response

The response addresses both questions with developed main ideas, including a relevant workplace example, but the confused final paragraph weakens the overall answer and the position stated in the introduction is partially muddled.

6.5
CC

Coherence and Cohesion

Ideas are organised into logical paragraphs with a range of cohesive devices, though linking is at times mechanical and the abrupt shift from 'advantages' to the disadvantage discussion disrupts progression.

6.5
LR

Lexical Resource

Vocabulary is generally adequate and flexible for the topic, but imprecise expressions such as 'push their bottom lines' and 'work solo' reduce precision at points.

6.5
GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

A variety of sentence structures are used with generally good control, and errors, including a tense inconsistency in the competition example and occasional article misuse, rarely impede meaning.

7.0

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Rewrite the conclusion to give a clear, direct summary answering both questions, replacing muddled phrasing such as 'Although to pen down'.

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