Hiring Personal Fitness Trainers

In some countries, more and more people are hiring a personal fitness trainer, rather than playing sports or doing exercise classes. What are the reasons for this? Is this a positive or a negative development?

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WhyThis is aPositive or negative essay — it asks why a trend is happening and whether it is good or bad.

SoWe split the ideas intoReasons(why it is happening),Positive(why it is good)andNegative(why it is bad).

Reasons

4 ideas

Positive

5 ideas

Negative

2 ideas

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Essay · 281 words · 4 paragraphs · 6 comments

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Response 01
Estimated band7.0/ 9

Overall assessment

The response directly answers both questions with a clear positive position and well-developed, supported reasons, including a relevant example. The strongest aspect is its coherent structure and clear progression; the main limitation is somewhat formulaic linking and occasional imprecise word choice rather than any gap in content.

TR

Task Response

The essay addresses both parts of the task with a clear position, develops two reasons and two benefits logically, and supports them with relevant examples, though development is solid rather than extended to full depth.

7.0
CC

Coherence and Cohesion

Ideas are organised logically across clear paragraphs with effective use of cohesive devices, although linking is occasionally mechanical and the range of referencing is somewhat limited.

7.0
LR

Lexical Resource

Vocabulary is sufficiently flexible and precise for the topic, with some less common items like disposable income and lucrative sector, but occasional slightly unnatural collocations remain.

7.0
GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

A variety of sentence structures, including complex forms, is used with good control and only minor errors that do not impede communication.

7.0

What to work on next

Vary cohesive devices beyond mechanical connectors like firstly, secondly, and moreover, and refine collocations such as earn more disposable income to achieve more natural phrasing.

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