Children Spending Hours Daily on Smartphones

Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones.

Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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WhyThis is aPositive or negative essay — it asks why a trend is happening and whether it is good or bad.

SoWe split the ideas intoReasons(why it is happening),Positive(why it is good)andNegative(why it is bad).

Reasons

6 ideas

Positive

5 ideas

Negative

9 ideas

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Response 01

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Essay · 290 words · 4 paragraphs · 15 comments

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Response 01
Estimated band6.0/ 9

Overall assessment

The response addresses both parts of the question with a clear negative stance and relevant reasons, which is its strongest aspect. The main limitation is shallow and sometimes implausible development, together with repetitive vocabulary and frequent grammatical errors that occasionally strain communication.

TR

Task Response

The response addresses both questions with a clear position and relevant ideas, but development is thin and supported by weak or implausible examples, such as the claim that a colleague became blind from phone use.

6.0
CC

Coherence and Cohesion

Progression is broadly clear across paragraphs, but cohesion is mechanical, with formulaic framing, abrupt transitions, and sentences loosely linked, such as the unprompted policy suggestion in the third paragraph.

6.0
LR

Lexical Resource

Vocabulary is adequate for the task, with some appropriate collocations, but it is repetitive (phone use, eyes glued, relax stress) and occasionally imprecise, such as 'a long duration of their time'.

6.0
GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

A mix of simple and complex structures is attempted, but errors are frequent, including faulty parallelism, dangling constructions, and agreement problems, though the meaning is mostly recoverable.

6.0

What to work on next

Develop each main idea more fully with more plausible, better-explained examples rather than adding loosely connected claims.

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