Urban Population Percentage in Four Asian Countries 1970-2040

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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Key features: Urban Population Percentage in Four Asian Countries 1970-2040

WhyThis is aLine graph — it asks you to report the main trends and changes over time.

SoWe split the points intoOverview(the main trends over the period)andKey features(figures and comparisons worth reporting).

Overview

2 points

Key features

5 points

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Response 01

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Score details

Response 01
Estimated band5.5/ 9

Overall assessment

The response attempts an overview and covers all four countries, including projections. However, it incorrectly identifies the Philippines as the future leader and contains confused data attribution and sequencing. Awkward noun phrases and unclear references make several details difficult to follow, while the single paragraph provides little separation between the overview and supporting figures.

TA

Task Achievement

The response covers all four countries and offers an overview, but the projected leader is incorrectly identified as the Philippines rather than Malaysia. Thailand’s 2020 figure is placed below 30% although its marker is above 30%, and its projected rise is understated; the Philippines detail also lacks a clear country label.

5.5
CC

Coherence and Cohesion

Progression is uneven within a single paragraph. Altogether does not clearly introduce the starting figures, The number of city people leaves the country unstated, and followed by reverses the order of the 1990 and 2010 changes, making the details harder to follow.

5.5
LR

Lexical Resource

Vocabulary is generally adequate for describing trends, with items like 'soar', 'witness a climb', and 'steadily', though there are inaccurate word choices ('living in the urbans', 'the figure of all the mentioned country') and spelling slips ('Phillippines', 'indonesia').

6.0
GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

Sentence structures show some variety, but errors include article omission in account for highest number, the singular country after all, and the singular was with percentages for two countries. Awkward noun phrases and prepositions also reduce clarity, although the main meaning is often recoverable.

5.5

What to work on next

Name the country and urban population percentage in each comparison, check the projected ranking, and present past changes in chronological order. Separate the overview from the supporting detail in clear paragraphs.

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