Manufacturing Process of Ceramic Pots

Response 01

Must fixSuggested

Clean text

Answer · 146 words · 4 paragraphs · 10 comments

Comments

Must fixTA

Identify the final manufacturing stage

Applies to: Paragraph 2
Suggestion: Overall, ceramic-pot production begins with the collection of raw materials and ends with colour firing, after the pots have been shaped, dried, fired and coloured.
Why: The diagram continues beyond colouring to colour firing. The revised overview includes this endpoint and uses a parallel begins with / ends with structure instead of the incomplete beginning with ... to construction.

SuggestedTA

Describe the visible mixing input

Original: mixed with other ingredients
Replace with: mixed with a liquid
Why: The mixing image shows a liquid entering the container, but does not name it or specify a recipe. Replacing the vague 'other ingredients' with the visible liquid makes the description more informative without inventing its composition.

SuggestedLR

Use a precise transfer verb

Original: placed into moulds
Replace with: poured into moulds
Why: The diagram shows the mixture flowing from the mixing container through a pipe into the moulds. Poured describes this liquid transfer more precisely than the general verb placed.

Must fixGRA

Separate the introductory clause

Original: shape it
Replace with: shape, it
Why: The clause beginning Once ends at shape. A comma marks its boundary before the main clause it is then dried.

SuggestedTA

Report the two crushing stages

Applies to: Paragraph 3
Suggestion: After transport to the factory, mention that the raw material passes through two crushing stages before mixing and moulding.
Why: The diagram shows two successive crushing units. The single reference to crushing compresses this visible sequence; adding that it happens twice makes the description more complete.

SuggestedLR

Use the ceramic-production term

Original: baked at
Replace with: fired at
Why: Fired is the technical verb for heating ceramic pots in an oven. Using it here also makes the relationship with the later colour-firing stage clearer.

Must fixGRA

Remove the space before the comma

Original: baked ,
Replace with: baked,
Why: A comma attaches directly to the preceding word; the space belongs after it.

Must fixCC

Remove the stray number

Original: again fired (3)
Replace with: fired again
Why: The parenthetical (3) has no explained reference in the description. Remove it; fired again expresses the repeated operation clearly.

Must fixTA

Do not assign an unlabelled purpose

Original: to dry the colour
Replace with: during colour firing
Why: The diagram labels the final heating operation colour firing. It does not state that this operation is performed to dry the colour, so report the stage without asserting that purpose.

SuggestedTA

End with the shown output

Applies to: Paragraph 4
Suggestion: The finished pots are the final output of the process.
Why: Being ready for sale or use is a reasonable inference from finished pots. For a diagram summary, naming the visible final output directly gives a more source-focused ending instead of adding downstream activities that are not shown.

Score details

Response 01

Estimated band7.0/ 9

Overall assessment

The response follows the process clearly from extraction and transport through moulding, drying, firing and colouring. It reports the drying duration and oven temperature accurately and uses appropriate passive structures. However, the overview ends at colouring rather than colour firing, while the detailed account compresses the two crushing operations and makes unsupported claims about ingredients and the purpose of the final heating. The report meets the 150-word minimum; accuracy and completeness are more useful priorities than extra length.

Task Achievement

The response reports most stages in order and accurately gives the 4–6-hour drying period and approximately 1,000°C oven temperature. The overview misses the final colour-firing stage, and the account compresses the two crushing operations. Claims about other ingredients and drying the colour go beyond what the diagram identifies.

7.0

Coherence and Cohesion

The report is well organised with a logical sequence of stages, effective use of sequencing language like 'Firstly' and 'Once', and clear paragraphing.

7.0

Lexical Resource

Vocabulary is appropriate for a process description, including 'mined', 'crushed', 'moulds' and 'fired'. Using 'fired' consistently for ceramic heating and describing the mixture as being poured into moulds would make the account more technically precise.

7.0

GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

The report uses passive constructions and subordinate clauses effectively. Minor problems include the incomplete 'beginning with ... to' structure in the overview, a missing comma after the introductory moulding clause and a space before a comma in the final paragraph.

7.0

What to work on next

Revise the overview to end with colour firing. Distinguish the two crushing operations, describe the mixing inputs only as far as the image supports, and report the final heating without claiming that its purpose is to dry the colour.

Response 02

Must fixSuggested

Clean text

Answer · 147 words · 4 paragraphs · 11 comments

Comments

Must fixGRA

Complete and streamline the introduction

Applies to: Paragraph 1
Suggestion: The diagram shows one method of producing ceramic pots.
Why: The introductory sentence needs a final full stop. The revision also removes the unnecessary feasibility judgement 'viable' and identifies the diagram and manufacturing method directly.

Must fixGRA

Use comprises without of

Original: comprises of
Replace with: comprises
Why: Comprise takes its object directly: the process comprises eleven steps. Alternatively, use consists of.

Must fixTA

Give the overview main features

Applies to: Paragraph 2
Suggestion: Expand the overview to state that the process starts with raw-material extraction and ends with finished pots, and that the pots are fired both before and after colouring.
Why: A stage count alone does not summarise the process. Its starting point, endpoint and two firing stages provide a useful overall picture without repeating the detailed sequence.

Must fixGRA

Add the article

Original: called digger
Replace with: called a digger
Why: Digger is a singular countable noun here, so it needs an article.

SuggestedCC

Separate excavation from transport

Applies to: Paragraph 3
Suggestion: Split the long sentence after the excavation step. Use a second sentence to describe truck transport to the factory, then leave the factory operations to the following paragraph.
Why: This sentence joins the opening detail phrase, excavation, transport and a forward reference to eight stages. Two shorter sentences would make the transition from collection to factory processing easier to follow.

SuggestedTA

Distinguish the visible input from its identity

Original: water
Replace with: a liquid
Why: The diagram shows liquid entering the mixing container through an inlet but does not label it as water. Water is a plausible interpretation; using 'a liquid' keeps the detail at the level the image explicitly supports.

Must fixGRA

Join the clauses correctly

Original: then the
Replace with: and then the
Why: The next step involves ... and the mixture is poured ... are independent clauses. A comma alone cannot join them; add and before then.

Must fixGRA

Use resulting as the modifier

Original: resulted
Replace with: resulting
Why: Resulting means produced by the preceding operation. Resulted is a past-tense verb form and cannot modify mixture in this construction.

SuggestedLR

Describe what moulding does

Original: to form the shape of ceramic pots
Replace with: to shape the clay into pots
Why: Shape the clay into pots identifies the material being shaped and the resulting form directly. Form the shape of ceramic pots is unnecessarily roundabout.

Must fixTA

Use the labelled temperature

Original: over 1,000
Replace with: 1,000
Why: The oven is labelled 1,000 degrees Celsius. Over changes that value into a lower bound, which the diagram does not support.

Must fixTA

Distinguish the moulds from the pots

Applies to: Paragraph 4
Suggestion: After the clay has dried in the moulds for 4 to 6 hours, the moulds are opened to release the pots.
Why: The drying image shows clay held inside moulds. At the next stage, labelled 'assembled clay pots', the mould sections are open around a separate pot. The original incorrectly makes the moulds themselves the objects assembled into pots; describe the clay drying and the pot being released instead.

Score details

Response 02

Estimated band7.0/ 9

Overall assessment

The response follows the manufacturing sequence from excavation to finished pots and includes both crushing operations, the drying duration and the final colour-firing stage. Its overview gives only a stage count, so it needs a clearer summary of the process's main features. The account also confuses the moulds with the clay pots and reports a temperature above the labelled value. At 150 words, the report meets the minimum length; the priorities are factual precision and grammatical corrections.

Task Achievement

The response covers the main sequence and correctly reports two crushing operations and 4–6 hours of drying. However, the overview gives only a stage count, the moulds are incorrectly described as becoming pots, and 'over 1,000 degrees Celsius' differs from the oven's labelled 1,000°C temperature. The report meets the 150-word minimum.

7.0

Coherence and Cohesion

The report follows a logical general-to-specific sequence and uses linking expressions to connect stages. The extraction-and-transport paragraph is one long sentence with a forward reference to eight stages; dividing it into two sentences would make the transition to factory processing easier to follow.

7.0

Lexical Resource

Vocabulary is generally appropriate for manufacturing, with useful terms such as 'moulds' and 'colour firing'. The phrase 'form the shape of ceramic pots' can be made more direct, while 'resulting mixture' is the correct expression for the product of the preceding mixing stage.

7.0

GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

A wide range of structures is used, including accurate passive voice and varied subordination, though occasional errors such as "comprises of" and "the resulted mixture" prevent a higher rating.

7.0

What to work on next

Give the overview a clear starting point, endpoint and two firing stages. Describe the clay drying inside the moulds and the pots being released, use the labelled 1,000°C temperature, and correct 'comprises of', 'called digger' and 'resulted mixture'.

Key features: Manufacturing Process of Ceramic Pots

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Sample responses and feedback

Response 01

Score details

Overall assessment

Task Achievement

Coherence and Cohesion

Lexical Resource

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

What to work on next

Response 02

Score details

Overall assessment

Task Achievement

Coherence and Cohesion

Lexical Resource

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

What to work on next

Useful vocabulary: Manufacturing Process of Ceramic Pots

raw materials

placed into moulds

mixed with other ingredients

placed in an oven

ready for sale

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raw materials

placed into moulds

mixed with other ingredients

placed in an oven

ready for sale

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