Benefits and Disadvantages of Nuclear Technology

The threat of nuclear weapons maintains world peace and nuclear power provides cheap and clean energy. The benefits of nuclear technology far outweigh the disadvantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It has been argued that addressing the nations about the usage of nuclear weapons assists a lot in creating harmony in the world. Although using nuclear energy does not create pollution and is inexpensive in nature, its advantages outweigh its disadvantages. I agree with it and

First off, the usage of nuclear weapons is the only way to create harmony in the whole world. To elaborate, when a nation threatens any other nations about their plan to destroy them by nations oppose the decision made by the affluent nations. The only option left is to reconcile with the powerful country. Therefore, world peace is established as the nations are aware of the repercussion of this action. To exemplify it, the whole globe witnessed the destruction of humanity after and World War II. Even after so many years, some pieces of land could not be turned into fertile land. So the threat to use is beneficial to create world peace.

Furthermore, the use of nuclear energy improves the quality of life in many more ways than people realise. It uses radioactive materials, which have a variety of important uses in electricity generation, medicine, industry, agriculture, and our homes. An inexpensive and clean source is better than using other alternative sources such as and diesel, which have more carbon emissions. Only one disadvantage cannot be proven. It has more demerits as it is difficult to establish a nuclear plant because of any leakage, which can have devastating effects on this planet. However, its advantages cannot be ignored.

To conclude, it is apparent that the threat to use , which have the power to ruin the whole world, can create peace in the world and bring it a cheaper source of energy as well as create less pollution as compared with other conventional fuels, makes it more useful than harmful.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.0

The response takes a clear position and attempts to develop both the deterrence and energy arguments with examples and some concession, which is its strongest aspect. However, the argumentation is often muddled and internally contradictory, and frequent awkward phrasing and grammatical slips repeatedly strain clarity. The essay meets the length requirement and follows a conventional structure, but uneven control of language and logic holds it back.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Response

6.0

The essay states a clear position and addresses both nuclear deterrence and energy benefits, but ideas are unevenly developed, the example is loosely relevant, and the handling of the disadvantage is confusing and contradictory.

Coherence and Cohesion

6.0

The response uses a clear paragraph structure with common cohesive devices, yet progression within paragraphs is often mechanical and several passages, including the final sentence, are hard to follow.

Lexical Resource

6.0

There is adequate range of topic-related vocabulary such as repercussions, carbon emissions, and conventional fuels, but awkward and inaccurate collocations recur and limit precision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6.0

A mix of simple and complex structures is attempted, but frequent errors in verb forms, articles, and sentence construction, especially in the conclusion, reduce overall accuracy and clarity.