Advantages of Attending School at a Young Age

Some people believe that children should be allowed to stay at home and play until they are six or seven years old. Others believe that it is important for young children to go to school as soon as possible. What do you think are the advantages of attending school from a young age?

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People have different opinions with regard to the question of ‘what is the right age for the children to start school?’ Although I accept that the younger generations should be permitted to stay at home and play till they reach a certain age, I also agree that it is much needed for them to start formal education soon. I would say that six or seven years would be a bit late to start school while 4-5 years would be the ideal time to do so.

On the one hand, allowing children to be at home and play till they attain an age of six or seven has several benefits. Firstly, would be avoided. Childhood days are meant to be enjoyed and there is no harm in letting them enjoy their freedom of life. Secondly, parental care is required until a certain age. For example, personal hygienic habit would be followed perfectly by a child if it is learnt from their parents. Finally, it is obvious that a child , so it would be much easier for teachers to handle the students at an educational institution. Therefore efficient teaching and grasping would be the start of education for every child.

On the other hand, an early education is the need of the hour to face the competitive world. Since the parents want their kids to be they aim to give an excellent educational background to them. Instead of learning the basics at the age of six or seven, they want their children to be updated. That is the reason why so many play schools have been established these days. There are even several extra classes being conducted for cognitive development like mid-brain activation on the age group below six. On the whole, making the younger minds to learn at this age, their mothers and fathers ensure that their child's time is well spent for the personal development which would help them to face the future life confidently. Finally, while I agree that freedom should be given to every child to cherish the childhood days, I believe to get them educated soon to secure their future.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.5

The response presents a clear, consistent position and organises ideas into well-signposted paragraphs, which is its strongest feature. Its main limitation is uneven task focus, as the discussion of home-based childhood occupies much of the essay while the requested advantages of early schooling receive comparatively thin, underdeveloped treatment.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Response

6.0

The response presents a clear position and relevant ideas, but devotes substantial content to the alternative view while the advantages of early schooling, which the question explicitly asks about, are only partially developed.

Coherence and Cohesion

6.5

Paragraphing is logical and cohesive devices are used throughout, though some linking and referencing is mechanical or slightly forced in places.

Lexical Resource

6.5

The response uses a range of topic-related vocabulary, but some wording lacks precision, including "gets little mature comparatively" and the claim that parents want children "to be updated". The phrase "the need of the hour" is a valid expression.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6.5

There is a mix of simple and complex structures with reasonable flexibility, though noticeable errors in subject-verb agreement, articles, and clause formation occur fairly regularly without usually blocking meaning.