Advantages of Attending School at a Young Age

Some people believe that children should be allowed to stay at home and play until they are six or seven years old. Others believe that it is important for young children to go to school as soon as possible. What do you think are the advantages of attending school from a young age?

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When it comes to school age, there are some people who believe that it is for the young children to stay home until . On the contrary, in , the more school age would be earlier, the more benefits children would achieve. In today`s lifestyle, it seems that the second group follow the appropriate strategy because of some considerable merits as .

According to the fast-changing world , for children plays a vital role in their future life. Starting to go to school could the high potential of this period of life.

Thanks to the fact that today, children`s abilities in many fields are gradually increasing, due to the widespread improvement in life conditions ranging from nutrition and health to education methods, they acquire suitable abilities from earlier ages, in comparison with the past. Therefore, the parents being aware of this could lead their children to .

As one other advantage of , it could be mentioned that the average age of the academic social would decrease. As a result, the young would achieve more opportunities to for their career life.

In conclusion, it seems that nowadays, the school age has decreased and this change generally has resulted in improvement in the young`s , their faster progress in knowledge and in the field of work.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.0

The response addresses the task by presenting several plausible advantages of early schooling and reaching a clear conclusion, which is its strongest aspect. However, ideas are unevenly developed and frequent awkward or inaccurate phrasing reduces the precision and clarity of the argument throughout.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Response

6.0

The response addresses the question by giving a position and several relevant advantages of early schooling, but the ideas are only partially developed and occasionally expressed unclearly.

Coherence and Cohesion

6.0

There is a generally clear overall progression from introduction to conclusion with appropriate cohesive devices, though some linking is mechanical or faulty.

Lexical Resource

6.0

The response shows an adequate range of vocabulary with some attempt at less common items, but noticeable errors in word choice and collocation such as 'better manner' and 'academic social' recur.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6.0

A mix of simple and complex structures is attempted with reasonable flexibility, but frequent grammatical errors, particularly in comparatives and article use, reduce accuracy.