Advantages of Attending School at a Young Age

Some people believe that children should be allowed to stay at home and play until they are six or seven years old. Others believe that it is important for young children to go to school as soon as possible. What do you think are the advantages of attending school from a young age?

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A group of people believe that enrolling children in school at an early age is a negative thing. They think that the best age for children to enter school is around six or seven years old. On the contrary, other people believe that children should go to school at the earliest possible age. The following essay will discuss these two different views .

On the one hand, it is a fact that many parents are enrolling their children in school at an early age these days. These children have been at the age of two or three years. These people think that educating their children at an early age is a good thing since the children would be much smarter and brighter than those who go to school at the standard age. However, there have been some negative cases reported regarding this act. Some of them have become stressed and depressed and impacted on their normal behaviour.

On the other hand, there are parents who believe that children should start school at the normal age, which is around six or seven years old. These people believe that the standard age defined by the Ministry of Education has been set based on some scientific and psychological research. Therefore, it would be best for parents to follow the standard. Besides that, children could also learn things at home before they reach the school age period. Parents could purchase some educative toys for their children such as Lego which would help them in learning words, shape and colours.

In conclusion, people have argued about the best age for children to enter school. Some of the people prefer to register their children at the age of two or three while others just enrol their children at the normal age, which is . Both views have their own but I personally believe that registering the children at the normal age is the best way.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.5

The response is clearly written and well organised, with generally accurate language and some appropriate vocabulary. Its main limitation is that it answers a different task: instead of explaining the advantages of attending school from a young age, it debates the ideal starting age and concludes in favour of the standard age.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Response

5.0

The response addresses the general topic but does not answer the actual question about the advantages of attending school from a young age, instead discussing both views and taking a position that early entry is unwise, so the task is only partially addressed with limited relevant development.

Coherence and Cohesion

7.0

Ideas are organised logically into clear paragraphs with appropriate linking devices and a consistent progression throughout, though the content serves the wrong task focus.

Lexical Resource

6.0

Vocabulary is generally adequate for the topic with some natural collocations such as enrolling children and educative toys, but there are occasional awkward or inaccurate word choices such as advantages point, in details, and impacted on their normal behaviour.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.0

A range of sentence structures, including complex forms, is used with generally good control, and errors are mostly minor and non-impeding.