Advantages of Attending School at a Young Age

Some people believe that children should be allowed to stay at home and play until they are six or seven years old. Others believe that it is important for young children to go to school as soon as possible. What do you think are the advantages of attending school from a young age?

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Children are born proactive in the present is quite enthusiastic to make their child grow faster. It is the responsibility of the parents to send their children to school at the right age. It can be believed that sending children to school is more comfortable rather than keeping them at home. In my opinion, a child definitely gains something more if he is sent to school at a very young age.

Globally speaking, nowadays we have extraordinary school teachings like e-techno. If we consider this as an instance children gain much knowledge visually than the technical way of implementation. Even a child with an average IQ can also understand what is happening around him. Moreover, education is a part of life which does not have an end. So, every parent thinks to send their children at a particular age.

Some people think that children should stay with the parent until they are at least six or seven years old because children feel forcible and uncomfortable at a very young age without them. But, the education system is changing more and behaviour of the parents has to change according to the system. Furthermore, completion of studies may make the student get into corporate companies and mould to the outside world at a very young age.

To summarise, I personally believe that children should be sent to school at a young age since, in today’s world, competition plays an important role. Everything goes on ‘ depends on the mental and physical ability of . Since not everyone is a child prodigy their capabilities are to be considered.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.0

The response takes a clear position favouring early schooling and attempts to support it with examples about modern teaching and competitiveness. However, the arguments are often underdeveloped or drift from the question's focus on advantages, and language errors such as 'forcible' and faulty clause joining regularly cloud the message.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Response

6.0

The response presents a relevant position on early schooling and attempts to identify advantages, but ideas such as competition and corporate readiness are unevenly developed and some content, like the discussion of parents keeping children home, is only partially connected to the question about advantages.

Coherence and Cohesion

6.0

Progression is broadly clear with paragraphing and linking devices such as 'moreover' and 'furthermore', but cohesion is sometimes mechanical and the logical relationships between ideas, especially within body paragraphs, are not always easy to follow.

Lexical Resource

6.0

The vocabulary is adequate for the task with some appropriate items like 'child prodigy' and 'mental and physical ability', but word choice is frequently imprecise, as in 'forcible', 'e-techno', and 'mould to the outside world', limiting flexibility and precision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6.0

A range of structures is attempted, but sentence boundaries are unreliable. "First Come First Serve’ basis it also depends" fuses independent clauses without punctuation, while "the education system is changing more rapidly, the way of thinking" joins clauses with only a comma. These errors reduce control even where the main idea is understandable.